Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear boss,

I am writing to inform you about my study related issues.

I am Kruti Patel ,The Senior Therapist of your clinic since three years asking you about reducing my working hours. Usually my work starts by 9.00 am and ends by 6.00 pm.Due to this busy schedule I am not able to focus on my further studies.

I would appreciate if you change working hours from 9.00 am to 3.00 am.So that I have enough time to do my studies.

Also,I am studying for the phd which will give the benefits to the clinic because I am researching about the importance of exercise on ligament tear patients and as you know we as a sports therapist treating a numerous patients which have ligament issues.

I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely,

Kruti Patel

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt, explaining your reasons, proposing new hours, and highlighting the benefits to your employer. However, the response is under the 150-word minimum requirement, which negatively impacts the development of your ideas. While the content is relevant, the explanation regarding the benefits of your PhD research is somewhat brief and could have been expanded to better persuade your employer. To improve, ensure you meet the minimum word count by providing more detail and elaboration on each point, which will help you achieve a higher band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter follows a logical structure, moving from the purpose of the letter to the specific request and finally the benefits. Paragraphing is present, though the indentation is inconsistent. You use some basic cohesive devices like 'Also' and 'Due to', but the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical. To improve, try using a wider variety of linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more fluidly, such as 'consequently', 'furthermore', or 'in addition to this'. Ensure your paragraph breaks are clearly marked to improve the overall readability of your letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using professional terms like 'Senior Therapist' and 'ligament tear'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'study related issues' (which is vague) and 'treating a numerous patients' (which should be 'treating numerous patients'). The vocabulary is generally functional but lacks the precision and variety needed for a higher band. Focus on using more sophisticated collocations and ensuring that your word choices are grammatically accurate in context to enhance the professional tone of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are several grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'The Senior Therapist of your clinic since three years' (should be 'for three years'), 'I would appreciate if you change' (should be 'would appreciate it if you could change'), and '3.00 am' (which is likely a typo for 3.00 pm). Additionally, there are issues with article usage and preposition placement. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to affect the clarity of your message. Focus on proofreading for basic tense and preposition errors.

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