Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Manpreet,

I Hope this letter finds you in the good condition .

I am writing this letter to ask permission about the part time study that i am planning to start next month that would affect my office working hours .

My part time study about the gentle pursuaive approach going to start next month on 5 th september . This course is hybrid as most of the part would be done online after my working hours but the practical part is going to be offline starting at 12 pm on Monday and Wednesday for that i need to reduce my working hours .

For all the other days except Monday and Wednesday i do available till 4 pm but for Monday and Wednesday i had to leave the workplace at 12 .

The course include the general training how to help residents when they are having their behaviours during their bad days so by attending this course i can get the profound knowledge that i can use to provide them the best care with empathy and also i can get the license to train my other colleagues that in the end would be helpful for the whole organization .

I hope you will consider my request and grant me the hours of work that could be suitable for me to do this part time course .

Yours sincerely,

Harmanpreet kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.5

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the task. You clearly explain the reason for the request, specify the desired working hours, and describe the benefits to the employer. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. However, the development of ideas could be more precise; for instance, the description of the course content is slightly vague. To improve, ensure that the connection between your studies and the workplace benefits is explicitly stated, as you did well by mentioning the potential to train colleagues. Overall, the task is fully addressed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter follows a logical structure with a clear opening and closing. Paragraphing is used to separate the purpose of the letter from the specific details of the request and the benefits. While the progression of ideas is generally clear, some transitions between sentences feel slightly mechanical or repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'for that' or 'so'. Using a wider variety of cohesive devices, such as 'consequently' or 'furthermore', would improve the flow. Referencing is generally clear, though some sentence structures are a bit fragmented, which slightly affects the overall cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for this task, using terms like 'hybrid', 'profound knowledge', and 'empathy'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'in the good condition' (should be 'in good health' or 'well') and 'gentle pursuaive approach' (likely a spelling error and awkward phrasing). Some phrasing is also slightly unnatural, such as 'do available'. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and ensuring that your word choices are contextually appropriate for a professional setting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is good. However, there are frequent errors in punctuation and grammar that occasionally distract the reader. For example, there are issues with article usage ('the general training'), subject-verb agreement ('the course include'), and unnecessary spaces before punctuation marks. While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy and consistent punctuation will significantly improve your writing.

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