Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Alen,

I am writing regarding the working hours to reduce because of my Part time study.

As I informed you earlier that I got enrolled in new part time course of welding at Conestoga college. Because of that I have two days practical session on weekdays. For that full attendance is required to complete the course.

I want to continue my work along with this course for that I am fully available on weekends. So I am to requesting you to schedule me on weekends or in the evenings.

I also want to mention if I complete this course with the good grades I would be able to work as senior welder at your company and this will benefit your company to increase the production. Also you will not need to go through hiring process again. You do not need to spend time and money for training and advertisement purpose.

I am Looking forward to hear positive response from you .

Yours faithfully,

Anjali Labana.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly explain the reason for the request (welding course), specify the desired hours (weekends/evenings), and outline the benefits to the employer (increased production and reduced training costs). The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a supervisor. To reach a higher band, you could expand slightly on the specific nature of the welding course to make the argument for your professional development more compelling. Overall, the task is fully addressed with a clear purpose throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the prompt. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat basic and occasionally repetitive. For example, the transition between sentences could be improved by using more varied linking words such as 'consequently,' 'furthermore,' or 'in addition to this.' While the progression of ideas is clear, the flow between sentences feels slightly mechanical at times. Improving the variety of transition signals would enhance the overall cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'enrolled,' 'practical session,' and 'production.' However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'regarding the working hours to reduce' (should be 'regarding a reduction in my working hours') and 'to requesting you' (should be 'I am requesting'). While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise control over formal phrasing. Expanding your repertoire of professional collocations would help elevate your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The letter contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical slips, such as 'I got enrolled in new part time course' (missing articles: 'a new part-time course') and 'I am Looking forward to hear' (should be 'looking forward to hearing'). While you attempt complex sentences, some contain minor errors in verb forms or prepositions. The majority of your sentences are understandable, and the errors do not cause confusion, but more consistent control over articles and verb patterns is needed to reach a higher band.

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