Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear John,

I am planning to enroll myself in a college for the study. It is a part time course and basically in a food sector. I choose this stream because of high demand in my city. That is why i i want to reduce my working hours so that i can focus on my study.

I am going to start part time study and timing of my class will be 9 am to 3 pm from Monday to till Friday. I am available for evening shift from 4 pm till 11 pm. I do not have class on weekends so i can work opening and closing both.

In my course they will teach me the knife skills, multi-tasking and how to manage ticket times in a busy hours. This will benefit my employer a lot because i can contribute my learning to reach a successful goal of the restaurant.

I look forward to hearing from you at the earlist

Kind Regards,

Shruti

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining the reason for the request, specifying the desired hours, and describing the benefits to the employer. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. However, the development of ideas is somewhat basic. For instance, while you mention 'knife skills' and 'ticket times', explaining how these specifically improve restaurant efficiency would have strengthened the response. The purpose of the letter is clear, and the structure follows the requirements of a formal request letter effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific requirement of the task. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'That is why' and 'In my course'. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes a bit mechanical. To reach a higher band, try to use a wider variety of linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more fluidly. For example, instead of starting sentences with 'I am', you could vary your sentence structure to improve the overall progression of the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your meaning clearly, such as 'enroll', 'sector', and 'multi-tasking'. There are some minor inaccuracies, such as 'in a food sector' (should be 'the food sector') and 'at the earlist' (spelling error). You rely on some repetitive phrasing, such as 'part time study' and 'working hours'. To improve, try to incorporate more precise collocations related to professional requests and workplace skills. Overall, the vocabulary is adequate for the task, but lacks the flexibility and precision required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'I choose this stream' (should be 'chose' or 'have chosen'), 'timing of my class will be' (should be 'the timing of my classes'), and 'from Monday to till Friday' (redundant). Additionally, there are punctuation and capitalization issues, such as the lowercase 'i' used throughout the text. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall accuracy of your writing.

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