Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear sir,

I am prabhjot singh and i working in your pcos Trades company as a accountant . I am writing this letter to request to you for reducing my working hours in expect weekends As, i want to get a new part time study for my good future, which is masters in bechular .

So i want to reduce my working hours from 9am to 1pm for one year because that i will have my class in the college and that will take my approximate 4 hours include traveling by bus .

This study is more beneficial for employer because after complete that study i can helps multiple works in office as well as fast work in the accounts that can make good profit to your company.

your sincerly

prabhjot singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: the reason for the request, the proposed hours, and the benefits to the employer. However, the response is significantly under the 150-word minimum requirement, which negatively impacts the score. The ideas are presented but lack sufficient development; for example, the explanation of how the studies will benefit the employer is quite vague and could have been expanded with specific examples of skills or knowledge gained. To improve, you must elaborate on your points to meet the length requirement and provide more depth to your arguments.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The letter is organised into short paragraphs, which is appropriate for a formal letter. However, the progression of ideas is somewhat mechanical. There is a lack of varied cohesive devices; the letter relies on simple transitions like 'So' and 'because'. To improve, you should use a wider range of linking words and phrases (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in addition to this') to connect your ideas more fluidly. The referencing is generally clear, but the overall structure feels a bit disjointed due to the brevity of the sentences.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive. There are several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'bechular' (bachelor) and 'pcos Trades company'. The phrase 'helps multiple works' is unnatural and does not convey the intended meaning clearly. To reach a higher band, you need to use more precise professional terminology related to your role as an accountant and your academic goals. You should also focus on correct spelling and collocations, such as 'pursue a degree' rather than 'get a study'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('i working', 'i can helps') and article usage ('a accountant'). The sentence structures are mostly simple, with limited attempts at complex sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and capitalization of 'I'. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring verbs agree with their subjects, and using correct punctuation throughout your writing.

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