Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Boss,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this email regarding to decrease my job hours due to study part time.

To commence , why I want to reduce my working hours, with over 40 hours of job in a week is not providing enough time for my studies. As I am doing part time study while doing work.

In addition, I would prefer to work from Monday to Wednesday instead of 5 days a week. For instance, If i will do my work full time, i am not able to doing my study along with work.

Eventually, my part-time studies would benefit for our company. For example, I am going to learn in data analytics field and these subjects are require for us in our company to predict and forecast new patterns and also identify the solutions for new challenges in our jobs.

Overall, I would appreciate if you could be able to consider my request. I look forward to your response.

Sincerely,

Dhruv Patel.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt: explaining the reason for the request, specifying the desired hours, and describing the benefits to the employer. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of how your studies benefit the company is a bit repetitive and could be more specific regarding how these skills would be applied in your current role. To reach a higher band, ensure that your arguments are fully extended with more concrete detail rather than just stating the intention.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. You use some cohesive devices such as 'In addition', 'For instance', and 'Overall'. However, the transitions between sentences are sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'To commence, why I want to reduce...'. The use of 'Eventually' to start the third paragraph is also misused, as it implies a final outcome rather than a logical progression of an argument. Improving the variety and naturalness of your linking words will help the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your meaning, such as 'data analytics', 'forecast', and 'patterns'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and collocation errors, such as 'regarding to decrease my job hours' (should be 'regarding a reduction in my working hours') and 'these subjects are require for us' (should be 'required'). While the vocabulary is adequate for the task, it lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands. Focusing on correct collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing will improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'I am doing part time study while doing work' (redundant), 'If i will do my work full time, i am not able to doing my study' (incorrect conditional structure and verb form), and 'could be able to consider' (redundant). These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader, though they do not prevent the message from being understood. To improve, focus on mastering conditional sentences and ensuring consistent verb forms.

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