Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear boss,

I am writing this letter to requesting regarding my working hours as a part-timer. I am working here since 2 years, and i still want to work however, I want to study master of business administration ,and i was trying for this course approval since last 2 months now i am got enrollment letter. Therefore, i want to work here as a part timer rather than full timer. This course duration is six months only. As my course time -table is according 3 days of week. I will be available on Tuesday, Wednesday, and friday. My courses are realated to our industry so after my completion of course i would be able to apply my course stretagies in work place so. I think this is a plus point for us. Not only this i will apply my experience too. I would be really appreciate if you look into this matter

Your faithfully,

Afroza Patel.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the task: explaining the reason for the request, specifying the desired hours, and describing the benefits to the employer. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, although the opening 'Dear boss' is slightly informal; 'Dear [Name]' or 'Dear Manager' would be better. The ideas are relevant and clear, though the development could be more sophisticated. For instance, the explanation of how your studies benefit the company is a bit brief. Overall, you have fulfilled the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical progression, moving from the request to the details and finally the benefits. However, the paragraphing is weak; the entire body of the letter is presented as a single block of text, which makes it harder to read. You use some cohesive devices like 'Therefore' and 'Not only this', but the flow is occasionally interrupted by awkward phrasing and punctuation errors. To improve, ensure you use clear paragraph breaks to separate the introduction, the main body points, and the closing statement.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey your message, such as 'enrollment letter' and 'industry'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and spelling mistakes, such as 'stretagies' instead of 'strategies' and 'realated' instead of 'related'. Additionally, the phrase 'requesting regarding' is grammatically incorrect. While your meaning is clear throughout, the vocabulary is somewhat basic and lacks the precision required for higher band scores. Focusing on correct spelling and more natural collocations will help improve your score in this area.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with verb tenses ('I am working here since 2 years'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. For example, 'i was trying for this course approval since last 2 months now i am got enrollment letter' is quite fragmented and contains multiple errors. You rely heavily on simple sentence structures, and the punctuation is inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and capitalization of 'I'. To reach a higher band, you need to work on complex sentence construction and ensure consistent control over basic grammar rules.

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