Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

dear wendy,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter regarding reduction of my working hours. As I got admission in master of business management in tronoto university .

Furthermore, my first semester is going to start first of september . Every week i have four in person classes on campus. Therefore, i am not able to do work as a full time employee at your workplace. Since, i am an international student ,so i can just do 24 hours of a week. i hope you will understand my situation.

Moreover, I can provide you my full week schedule of university, as you can adjust my hours accordingly. likely, i am available full time on weekends ,so you can give me full day shift on these days ,even i can work 12 hours shift easily. since , I have one day off on monday but that day i want to spend on my study and other lesiure activities to rejuvenate myself after a busy or hectic sechdule.

Apart from this, I Think that my course not only is going to very fruitful for your business but also for me too. as you know that how business strategy is essential for a retail or supermarket to enhance sales as well as customers. Therefore, i think that i willl able to help you for these kinds of things.

let me know if you need my schedule of classes and please give me hours according to it and need. i hope you will think about it.

thanks

Ridhi

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points of the prompt: explaining the reason for the reduction in hours, specifying the desired schedule, and describing the benefits to the employer. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter to a manager, although it occasionally slips into a slightly informal register. The ideas are relevant and clearly presented, providing enough detail to satisfy the requirements of the task. The purpose of the letter is clear from the beginning, and the student maintains a consistent position throughout the response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the request. The use of cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'Moreover', and 'Apart from this' helps to guide the reader through the text. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the paragraphing could be more refined to improve the flow. There are minor issues with punctuation and sentence structure that occasionally disrupt the progression of ideas, but the overall structure remains clear and easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully conveying the intended meaning. There are some attempts to use more specific terminology, such as 'rejuvenate' and 'fruitful', which is positive. However, there are several spelling errors (e.g., 'tronoto', 'sechdule', 'lesiure') and some awkward phrasing (e.g., 'give me hours according to it and need'). While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more careful proofreading and a wider command of collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the student attempts complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly regarding articles (e.g., 'in master of business management'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence fragments (e.g., 'Since, i am an international student ,so i can just do 24 hours of a week'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with frequent misuse of commas and capitalization errors. These errors are noticeable and occur throughout the text, though they rarely prevent the reader from understanding the core message.

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