Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Miss Kulveer

Hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to you regarding my working hours. As I mentioned you last month, I am looking for Level 2 course for ECE, so I got the acceptance letter yesterday.

However, I am the only person in our day care who used to do openings from last year, due to my further studies its little hard for me to stay until 4 PM. Therefore, I request you to reduce my working hours as it would be difficult for me to manage studies and work on same time. Although my course is online, still I have to do my studies without any distractions, in order to crack my goal as soon as possible. So, I would prefer to work as a part time student, I can do opening shifts but only until midnoon.

Moreover, my studies will bring better opportunity not only for me, also for you as well. Because now we have only two employees with level 2, but after me completion I will also be eligible for level 2, which could be great fit for our preschool kids.

I would appreciate your immediate attention to this request.

your sincerely

Amandeep

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The letter successfully addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly explain the reason for the request (pursuing a Level 2 ECE course), specify the desired working hours (opening shifts until mid-noon), and articulate the benefit to the employer (gaining a qualified staff member). The tone is appropriate for a formal request to a supervisor. The ideas are relevant and sufficiently developed to meet the requirements of the task. To reach a higher band, ensure that the connection between your studies and the employer's benefit is explained with slightly more professional depth, perhaps by mentioning how the new skills will directly improve the quality of care in the preschool.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized, with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. You use some cohesive devices such as 'However', 'Therefore', and 'Moreover' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by slightly awkward phrasing, such as 'As I mentioned you last month' (should be 'to you') and 'on same time' (should be 'at the same time'). Paragraphing is present, but the transition between the explanation of the course and the request for hours could be smoother. The use of referencing is generally clear, though some sentences feel a bit disjointed due to minor grammatical errors.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for this task. You use subject-specific terms like 'Level 2 course', 'ECE', and 'opening shifts' effectively. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'midnoon' (which is not standard; 'midday' or 'noon' would be better) and 'crack my goal' (which is informal; 'achieve my goal' is more appropriate). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your message clearly, it lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band score. Expanding your use of formal collocations would improve the overall quality.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is always clear, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. Examples include 'I am looking for Level 2 course' (missing an article), 'as I mentioned you' (incorrect preposition), and 'after me completion' (incorrect pronoun usage). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are some issues with sentence boundaries and comma usage. The errors do not impede communication, but they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct article usage will help improve your accuracy.

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