Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

dear boss,

i am Rajandeep kaur and i have to request to reduce my working hours due to study because i want to do study and get better grades in my education. if i do part time work then it helps to maintain my schedule also i can get some extra time to do proper study which result in better grades and complete study .

Moreover, i will explain my Avalibility here i am able to do work on Saturday , Sunday and Monday full time such as morning ,evenings and night time .

Additionally, now i describe the importance of part time studies would benefit for me because doing part time study very beneficial to get better information and get higher score in studies which helps to get scholarship and it helps to improve confidence as well its maintain my finnancial conditions .

Thanks to take my suggestion .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: the reason for the request, the proposed hours, and the benefits to the employer. However, the third bullet point is misinterpreted. You described how the studies benefit you (e.g., 'get better information', 'get scholarship') rather than how they would benefit your employer (e.g., by bringing new skills or knowledge to the workplace). The tone is also somewhat informal for a letter to a boss, lacking the professional register required for a formal request. To improve, ensure you explicitly link your studies to the company's productivity or goals.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is somewhat mechanical. You use basic cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'Additionally', but the transitions between sentences are often abrupt. The lack of proper punctuation, such as missing capital letters at the start of sentences and inconsistent spacing, makes the flow of the letter difficult to follow. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring clear sentence boundaries would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. For example, you use the word 'study' or 'studies' multiple times in almost every sentence. There are also errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'Avalibility' (Availability) and 'finnancial' (financial). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express your ideas with precision or professional tone. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using a wider variety of synonyms and ensuring correct spelling of common business-related terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement, sentence fragments, and punctuation. For instance, 'i am Rajandeep kaur and i have to request' is grammatically awkward, and the lack of capitalization for 'I' and proper nouns is a consistent issue. The sentence structures are mostly simple and repetitive. To improve, you need to focus on basic sentence construction, correct capitalization, and the use of articles and prepositions, which are currently missing or misused in several places.

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