Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mr. Amit,

I am writing to express my concern about my hours due to my study I have to increase them.

As you know that I am working full time here and but now my classes gonna be started next week. So, I will be not available full time to work. My classes starts from Monday to Thursday and on Friday I have practical class for computer lab.

I would perefer to do work on Weekends only as a part time. It is only for four months course and it is very important for me. If I will not complete this, I will not be able to do work here. For continuing my work in this field It is compalsary.

If I complete my study along with part time job I will get certificate of this and I can start making sites. Now, we're facing problems and getting loss in this but after that I am sure we will get offers from big companies.

I would be grateful for your prompt response.

Yours faithfully

Lovedeep kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: the reason for the request, the preferred hours, and the benefits to the employer. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. The explanation of how the studies benefit the employer is vague, relying on general statements like 'I can start making sites' and 'we will get offers from big companies' without explaining how these skills specifically integrate into the current business. The tone is also slightly inconsistent for a formal request to a boss, appearing a bit demanding in places, such as 'If I will not complete this, I will not be able to do work here'.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate. For example, the transition 'As you know that I am working full time here and but now' is clunky and grammatically awkward. While the overall structure is clear, the flow between sentences is sometimes interrupted by these errors in linking, which prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Paragraphing is present, but the internal cohesion within paragraphs needs more variety and precision.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range expected at higher levels. There are several spelling errors, such as 'perefer' and 'compalsary', and some word choice issues, such as 'getting loss' instead of 'suffering losses'. The language is generally functional, allowing the message to be understood, but it does not demonstrate a wide range of vocabulary or the ability to use less common items with flexibility. To improve, focus on using more professional terminology related to business and academic study.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Examples include 'my classes gonna be started', 'I will be not available', and 'If I will not complete this'. The use of future tenses and conditional structures is often incorrect. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction and verb tense usage limits the score. More attention to subject-verb agreement and correct auxiliary verb placement is required.

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