Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear steve,

I'm writing to share that, I was planning to lower my work hours because of my decision to pursue higher education. However, my plan is to not resign from my post as a chemical laboratory technician but it would be great if you allow me to continue both my work and studies part time.

Managing University and professional job could be difficult without proper planning that why I want my schedule to be updated according to my preference. As I have received my timetable from university of toronto to study chemical engineering yesterday and I have to attended classes on every monday, wednesday and thursday Morning's. I'm available for full days on tuesday, friday and weekend as well.

I see my self growing in ALS after completion of my degree moreover, even while studying as both are part of my career. I can implement learning from my classe in to my role be perform better additional labs's practical expericence will boost my understanding in the class. I hope you understand and make my shifts convient for me and for the company.

Best regards,

shoaib.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter covers all three bullet points required by the prompt: it explains the reason for the request, specifies the desired working hours, and describes the benefits to the employer. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal request to a supervisor. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For example, the explanation of how the studies will benefit the employer is a bit vague, relying on general statements like 'I can implement learning from my classe'. To reach a higher band, you should provide more specific examples of how your chemical engineering studies will directly improve your performance or contribute to the company's projects.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each serving a specific purpose. The progression of ideas is generally easy to follow. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'However', 'moreover', and 'as', to link your thoughts. However, the use of these devices is sometimes slightly mechanical or imprecise, such as the transition 'that why I want my schedule to be updated'. Additionally, some sentences are slightly disjointed, and the flow could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to connect your sentences more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey your message clearly. You use some relevant professional terms like 'chemical laboratory technician' and 'practical experience'. However, there are several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'classe' instead of 'classes', 'convient' instead of 'convenient', and 'Morning's' with an unnecessary apostrophe. These errors do not impede communication, but they do indicate a need for more careful proofreading. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and ensuring the correct spelling of common professional terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with punctuation, capitalization, and verb forms. Examples include 'I see my self' (myself), 'my classe in to my role be perform better' (which is grammatically incorrect), and inconsistent capitalization of days of the week. There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and article usage. While these errors rarely prevent the reader from understanding your intent, they occur frequently enough to keep the score in the 6.0 range.

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