Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

dear sir/madam

i am writting to request this letter to consinder my job as a part time in your company.As i work full time as crew member your company from last 2 years.now i am nable to work as full time due joing the frech classes.

Furthermore, i am availble on the weekends during the busy hours. it could be benefical for you as you know very well i manage the rush peak in very well mannered.

In addition , my frech course will also help you for getting the promotiton and sales in the stores beacause french is the first language in our country and many customers are uable to english.So, kindly request you to consider my request and i will promptly waiting for your response.

yours sincerely

Kiranjeet Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: the reason for the request, the preferred hours, and the benefit to the employer. However, the response is significantly under the 150-word minimum, which limits the development of ideas. The explanation of how French studies would benefit the employer is somewhat superficial. To improve, you should expand on how your language skills would specifically increase sales or improve customer service, and ensure you meet the length requirement to allow for a more professional and persuasive tone.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The letter is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and limited (e.g., 'Furthermore', 'In addition'). There are also issues with referencing and sentence flow, such as the abrupt transition in the first paragraph. To improve, try to use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that your sentences connect more naturally to one another to create a smoother, more professional flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which limits the professional tone required for a formal letter to a boss. There are several spelling errors, such as 'writting', 'consinder', 'nable', 'frech', 'availble', 'benefical', and 'promotiton'. These errors occasionally impede readability. To improve, you should focus on learning the correct spelling of common business-related terms and attempt to use more precise vocabulary, such as 'professional development' instead of 'frech classes' or 'peak periods' instead of 'rush peak'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'request this letter to consinder my job as a part time', 'due joing the frech classes', and 'many customers are uable to english'. These errors, particularly the missing verbs and incorrect prepositions, make the text difficult to follow at times. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and proofreading for missing words like 'to' or 'speak'.

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