Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Manager,

I hope you are doing well. A big thank you for selecting me for this advance course. It is extremely informative. I am writing to inform you regarding I would like to decrease my working hours due to focusing on the part time study.

The course is focuses on the advance food safety technologies. I have been enlightened to gain more deeper knowledge about this advance AI and robot technologies. Afterwards, It will prove more beneficial for my future aspects as well , because with this kind of knowledge I will be eligible for promotion and I can teach my other coullages as well about this. Ultimetaly , there are double benefits to my employer.

If you permit , I shall focus part time as in 20 hours a week on study and finish the course . I promise i will do my best and passed with distinction and again start my full time work as soon as possible.

In anticipation of your consideration.

Yours sincerely ,

Dhwani

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the task. You explained your reason for wanting to reduce hours (to focus on part-time study), specified the hours (20 hours a week), and described the benefits to your employer (gaining knowledge in AI and food safety to share with colleagues). The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter. To reach a higher band, ensure your ideas are developed with more precision; for example, explaining exactly how the AI knowledge applies to your specific workplace would strengthen the argument.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each serving a specific purpose. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Afterwards' and 'Ultimetaly', although some of these transitions are slightly awkward or misused. The progression of ideas is generally easy to follow. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words more naturally and ensure that your referencing (e.g., 'this kind of knowledge') clearly points back to the previously mentioned concepts to improve the flow between sentences.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'enlightened', 'distinction', and 'technologies'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'more deeper knowledge' (should be 'deeper knowledge') and 'future aspects' (should be 'future prospects'). Spelling errors like 'coullages' (colleagues) and 'Ultimetaly' (Ultimately) also occur. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and proofreading for spelling accuracy.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity, such as 'The course is focuses on' (should be 'The course focuses on') and 'I am writing to inform you regarding I would like to' (should be 'I am writing to inform you that I would like to'). Additionally, there are issues with verb tense and subject-verb agreement, such as 'passed with distinction' (should be 'pass with distinction'). Increasing your control over basic sentence construction will help improve your score.

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