Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to request to changing in my working hours, because I would like to enroll in graphic designing course for 6 months. This course demands compulsory attendence for study.

I am working full time from 9am to 5pm as content editor. The course requires compulsory attendance in morning 3 hours. So I would be appreciated if you could allow me to work part-time from 1pm to 5pm. This schedule would be convenient for me to do my work and studies simultaneously. As my classes are from 9am to 12pm. It would be easy for attend my classes in the morning and resume my work at 1pm.

I assure you that I can manage my work effectively. Additionally, this study will help me improve my editing skills, enable me to edit content using advance graphics and techniques. This will also benefits our company to get more benefits by allowing us to provide more creative and attractive designs to our clients.

Thank you for considering my request. I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,

Bijal

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You clearly explained the reason for the request (enrolling in a graphic design course), specified the desired working hours (1pm to 5pm), and articulated the benefits to your employer regarding improved editing skills and creative output. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a supervisor. The ideas are relevant and sufficiently developed to meet the requirements of the task. To reach a higher band, ensure that your opening and closing salutations are consistent with the level of formality required, and consider expanding slightly on how the new skills will be integrated into your current workflow.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear progression of ideas. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the request, which makes the letter easy to follow. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Additionally' and 'So', though the transition between sentences could be smoother in places. For example, the sentence 'As my classes are from 9am to 12pm' is a fragment that should be joined to the previous sentence to improve flow. Overall, the paragraphing is appropriate, and the letter maintains a consistent, professional tone throughout.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for this task, such as 'compulsory attendance', 'simultaneously', and 'effectively'. However, there are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'request to changing' (should be 'request to change') and 'get more benefits' (which is slightly repetitive). You also use 'advance graphics' instead of the correct adjective form 'advanced'. While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise control over word forms and collocations to reach a higher band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. However, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. For instance, 'I would be appreciated' is incorrect; it should be 'I would appreciate it'. There are also issues with article usage and verb forms, such as 'easy for attend' (should be 'easy to attend'). While these errors are noticeable, they do not prevent the reader from understanding your message. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of infinitives after adjectives.

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