Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mr. Ian,

I am requesting you to change my schedule for managing the study.

As I informed you that I was on my official drop and from next month, I have to attend the regular classes. Moreover, I need sufficient time to complete my attendence, assignments and tests. Thud, I am unable to work full-time in the upcoming months.

Furthermore, I am able to work from Friday to Sunday throughout the day. There is no any particular time period on those days because I have no class.

In addition to this, On those days, the store is hectic, and as I am working as a Supervisor here. My schedule would not affect on the operational activities. Everything will be goes smoothly. There would not be any need to hire a new person and provide the training. I need part-time work only for four months. After that, I again can restart my full-time work.

I look forward for the positive response from your side and I am awaiting your reply.

Yours faithfully.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly explain the reason for the request (studies), specify the preferred working hours (Friday to Sunday), and describe the benefits to the employer (no need for training, maintaining operational efficiency). The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter to a supervisor. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited; for instance, the explanation of how your studies benefit the employer could be more explicitly linked to your professional growth or future value to the company. Overall, the task is fulfilled, though the content could be expanded for greater impact.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical structure, moving from the request to the schedule and then to the benefits. You use some cohesive devices like 'Furthermore' and 'In addition to this' to link ideas. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical or awkward, such as 'Thud' (likely a typo for 'Thus') and the abrupt start to the second paragraph. Paragraphing is present, but the flow between sentences could be improved to make the letter feel more cohesive. Referencing is generally clear, but the overall progression of ideas could be smoother to reach a higher band.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey your message, using terms like 'operational activities' and 'full-time work'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and minor errors, such as 'official drop' (which is unclear) and 'there is no any particular time period'. The phrase 'everything will be goes smoothly' shows a lack of control over verb forms. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing. The vocabulary is sufficient for the task but lacks the flexibility and precision required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The letter contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow, such as 'I am requesting you to change my schedule for managing the study' and 'Everything will be goes smoothly'. There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and preposition usage. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on proofreading for basic tense consistency and sentence structure would significantly improve your score.

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