Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mr. Smith,

I am writing this letter to request you that I want to work four hours shift starting from 20th September because I am joining part time course to learn Artificial Intelligence.

As the matter of fact, Information industry is growing towards new technology that is AI. I am extremely interested to update my skillset so that I can adopt the industry changes. I have joined online class at Udemy which is around of four hours everyday that is the reason I am looking for reducing my working hours for a month only.

My classes in the evening from 4:00 to 8:00pm, so I really want to complete my job duties in the morning from 9:00 to 1:00pm. I also believe morning is the best time where I can coordinate with team members for the project progress and also provide updates to the clients and I will make sure to plan the next day before leaving.

I am learning Artificial Intelligence tools like Chatgpt, Google Gemini so that I can implement new standards to deliver the projects on a fast pace without compromising the quality. These AI tools are highly beneficial that will help our organization to gain more stakeholders and provide them productive softwares ontime.

Therefore I request you please allow my to reduce my working hours for a month.

I am looking forward to your reply.

Yours Sincerely,

Amei Smith

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You clearly explained the reason for the request (learning AI), specified the desired working hours (9:00 am to 1:00 pm), and articulated how your employer would benefit from your new skills. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. To improve, ensure that the connection between your studies and the company's specific needs is even more explicit. For example, you could mention how specific AI tools will directly improve current workflows or save the company time, rather than just stating it will help gain stakeholders.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the request, which makes the information easy to follow. You use some cohesive devices like 'Therefore' and 'As a matter of fact' to link ideas. However, some transitions are a bit mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'As the matter of fact'. To reach a higher band, try to use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that the flow between sentences is smoother, particularly when moving from your personal study goals to the benefits for your employer.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for this task, using industry-relevant terms like 'skillset', 'stakeholders', and 'implement'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For instance, 'request you that I want to work' is grammatically awkward; 'request to reduce my working hours' would be more natural. Additionally, 'productive softwares' is incorrect as 'software' is an uncountable noun. To improve, focus on learning the correct collocations for business English and avoid using 'of' where it is not required, such as in 'around of four hours'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is generally effective. However, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. Examples include 'I am writing this letter to request you that I want to work' (incorrect verb pattern), 'I have joined online class' (missing article), and 'allow my to reduce' (should be 'allow me'). While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles to improve your accuracy.

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