Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Madame,

I am Kiran Kaur. I am writing to inform you that I will work part time .

I worked as a teacher at your daycare. But, now I am going to take the study to gain more experience about my job. As the result, I will do part time job . My college will begin on 26 October , and my classes will be from Monday to Thursday . Beacuse, of this timing I will only be available from Friday to Saturday. I will prefers to work in morning due to exam preparation. I would like to work 20 hours per week . This will be suitable for my studies.

Moreover, this study is going to give me enough experince that I will be capable to openin my own daycare or helping you to manage your work. By doing this, It will help to you to balance your personal and professional life. So, you would enjoy with your family too.

I hope you like my idea and help me to cooperate in my study and job.

Your Sincerely,

Kiran Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining the reason for the request, specifying the desired hours, and describing the benefits to the employer. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter to a supervisor. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of how your studies will benefit the employer is a bit repetitive and could be more professional. To improve, ensure that your arguments are fully expanded and that the connection between your studies and the daycare's success is articulated with more clarity and professional maturity.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical structure, moving from the request to the specific details and finally to the benefits. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'As the result' to link ideas. However, the paragraphing is inconsistent, and some transitions feel mechanical or slightly unnatural. The flow between sentences is occasionally interrupted by grammatical errors, which makes the progression of ideas feel a bit disjointed at times. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed theme would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your needs clearly. You use some relevant terms such as 'part-time', 'available', and 'professional life'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and minor errors, such as 'take the study' instead of 'pursue further studies' and 'openin' (a spelling error). To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise professional collocations and ensure that your word forms are accurate. Expanding your range of vocabulary beyond basic terms will help you express your ideas with greater sophistication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with verb tenses ('I worked as a teacher... But, now I am going to'), subject-verb agreement, and punctuation (e.g., 'Beacuse, of this'). Additionally, there are errors with prepositions and articles. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to distract the reader. Focusing on basic sentence construction, correct verb tense usage, and proofreading for punctuation errors will significantly improve your accuracy.

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