Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 4.0)

with the advancement of technology,

undeniably a burgeoning number of people visiting

across the globe just to uploads pictures

on online platforms and this trend is

increasing in recent times. I consider this

a negative trend which is encouraging a

ignorance in persons who are not enjoying

nature.

To commence, There are numerous of effects of this

way of life. The first and foremost is the

not living the moment and creating memories of

those tourist sites. Since people are interested

in taking photos of themselves on varied natural

place, they are surely not relishing those precious

moments. As a result, they are not certainly

living a life whilst merely occupied with the

stress of posting visually perfect on social media,

they are counting more number of places they

visited for example, my cousin told me that she

is traveling different exotic places nationally or

internationally just to post pictures on their

Instagram for followers and likes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 1.0

The response is completely off-topic. The task required a formal letter to a boss requesting a reduction in working hours to study part-time. Instead, the student wrote an essay about the negative impact of technology and social media on tourism. Because the response fails to address any of the bullet points or the communicative purpose of the prompt, it cannot be assessed as a successful completion of the task. It does not follow the required letter format, nor does it address the specific scenario provided.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The text is organized into two paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. While there is an attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'To commence' and 'As a result', the connection between ideas is often strained. The transition between the introduction and the body paragraph is abrupt, and the overall structure does not reflect the requirements of a letter. The use of referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly when discussing the cousin's experience, which feels like an anecdotal insertion rather than a cohesive argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is somewhat limited and occasionally inaccurate. Phrases like 'burgeoning number of people' and 'relishing those precious moments' show an attempt to use more sophisticated language, but there are errors in collocation and word choice, such as 'a ignorance' (should be 'an ignorance') and 'varied natural place' (should be 'places'). The vocabulary is repetitive in places, and the range is not sufficient to demonstrate a high level of control, especially given the misuse of terms in the context of the essay.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with article usage ('a ignorance'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. For example, the opening sentence is a fragment rather than a complete sentence. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty, such as 'merely occupied with the stress of posting visually perfect on social media'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary capitalization and comma usage issues throughout the text.

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