Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to request in the reduction of working hours as I get enroll for further study to upgrade my knowledge in Logistics Management.

Recently, I get admission for the diploma course in Supply Chain Management in the university for which I have to attend offline classes. Therefore, I would unable to work full-time for the upcoming one year.

I would able to continue my shift till 2PM because My classes would from 3PM to 7PM. and I would like to be available during the weekends as well to cover any workload or an urgent assignment.

Along my work-experience, this course will not only assist me to become more specialized in the logistics sector, but also will improve my work-efficiency and overall productivity for the company.

I would appreciate your understanding towards my concern. I look forward for your prompt response.

Yours faithfully,

Manju Poonia

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter covers all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly explain the reason for the request (Logistics Management studies), specify the desired hours (until 2 PM), and describe the benefits to the employer (specialized knowledge and improved efficiency). The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. However, the development of ideas is somewhat brief. To reach a higher band, you could expand slightly on how your specific studies will directly solve current challenges in your workplace, providing more depth to your argument.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a formal closing. Each paragraph focuses on a specific requirement of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Therefore', 'Along with', and 'not only... but also'. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical or awkward, such as 'Along my work-experience', which is not a standard collocation. The paragraphing is appropriate, and the progression of ideas is easy to follow throughout the letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'Logistics Management', 'Supply Chain Management', and 'work-efficiency'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and minor collocation errors, such as 'get enroll' instead of 'enrolling', 'get admission' instead of 'have been admitted', and 'towards my concern' instead of 'regarding my request'. These errors do not impede communication, but they limit the score as they show a lack of flexibility and precision in word choice.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is good. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'I would unable to work' (missing 'be'), 'I would able to continue' (missing 'be'), and 'My classes would from' (missing 'be'). Additionally, there is a punctuation error where a sentence is split incorrectly: '3PM to 7PM. and I would like'. These errors are noticeable and occur frequently, although they do not prevent the reader from understanding your message.

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