Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Annie,

I am writing this convey that I would like to make alterations in my working hours, as I am planning to enroll in part-time business online course.

Being a HR assistant comes with profound responsibilities of the human resources department. However from next month I am planning to take up an online course to enhance my professional and business skills. As online sessions will be taking my time so I would like to request a change in my working hours from full-time to part-time

Currently my schedule is from 8 a.m. to 5 p.m. on weekdays and it is a packed timetable. Apart from weekends, I would require 12 hours more to continue my studies. If possible my weekdays hours can be amended 7 hours per day, excluding me enough time to attend tutoring.

Considering, my ongoing position I have opted MBA from International Business University that reinforces my communication skills as well as business tactics and strategies to match the modern business world. I am always eager to learn and take up more responsible roles.

Hope to listen promptly from you and your consideration on this agenda.

Yours Faithfully,

Ramandeep Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly explained your motivation for reducing hours, specified the desired schedule, and outlined how the MBA studies would benefit your employer. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. However, the explanation of the specific hours is slightly confusing; you mention needing 12 hours more but then suggest a 7-hour workday, which makes the calculation unclear. To improve, ensure your proposed schedule is explicitly stated so your boss can easily understand the impact on your availability. Overall, the task is well-covered.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter follows a logical structure with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. You use some cohesive devices such as 'However', 'Currently', and 'Apart from', which help guide the reader. However, the transition between the second and third paragraphs is a bit abrupt. The paragraphing is sufficient, but the flow could be improved by using more varied linking phrases to connect your current responsibilities with the proposed changes. The referencing is generally clear, though the connection between the study benefits and the employer's needs could be more tightly integrated.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate a good range of vocabulary, such as 'profound responsibilities', 'amended', and 'reinforces'. There are some minor collocation issues, such as 'Hope to listen promptly from you', which is not standard; 'I look forward to hearing from you' would be more natural. You also use 'excluding me enough time', where 'allowing me' would be more accurate. While you attempt some sophisticated language, there are occasional inaccuracies in word choice. Expanding your repertoire of formal business collocations would help you reach a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical slips, such as 'I am writing this convey' (missing 'to'), 'as online sessions will be taking my time' (slightly awkward phrasing), and 'If possible my weekdays hours can be amended' (word order). Punctuation is generally acceptable, though some sentences lack necessary commas for clarity. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct preposition usage will improve your accuracy.

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