Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to inform you that, I want to reduce my working hours for part-time study.

Firstly, I had my Bachelor's degree which helps me to get job in your company. But now, I need to grow in my carrer and I think master degree will fulfill my desire of getting promoted and to become a manager or CEO of company one day.

I am very pessionate about work. Consequently, your work will never effect because of my study schedule. I will do work in morning hours and attend classes in evening hours which helps me to balance both personal and proffesional life.

Master's study will not only give benefit to myself, it is also benifical for you. As you are looking for good assistance of yourself. when I have study my degree I will be eligible for that position when I have my degree as and with my 5years experience I will be great help for you aswell.

I hope you cooperate with me to do higher studies.

Your faithfully,

Kajal

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the task. You explained your motivation for studying, specified your preferred working hours, and outlined the benefits to your employer. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For example, the explanation of how your studies benefit the employer is a bit repetitive and lacks specific detail regarding the skills you will acquire. To improve, try to provide more concrete examples of how your new knowledge will directly contribute to the company's goals or specific projects.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical structure with clear paragraphing. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Consequently', and 'not only... but also' to link your ideas. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing, such as in the final paragraph where the transition between your studies and your eligibility for a position feels slightly disjointed. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus will help your writing feel more cohesive and professional.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for this task, using terms like 'professional', 'eligible', and 'cooperate'. However, there are several spelling errors ('carrer', 'pessionate', 'proffesional', 'benifical') and some awkward collocations, such as 'do work in morning hours' instead of 'work morning shifts'. To reach a higher band, focus on accurate spelling and using more precise business-related terminology. Expanding your vocabulary to include more sophisticated synonyms for common words will also help you express your ideas with greater clarity and impact.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally affect readability. Issues include incorrect verb tenses ('I had my Bachelor's degree' instead of 'I have'), subject-verb agreement, and punctuation errors, such as the unnecessary comma after 'that' in the first sentence. While your meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents a higher score. Focus on proofreading your work to catch basic tense and agreement mistakes, and try to vary your sentence structure by using more complex clauses correctly.

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