Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Mr. Patel,

I am writing to let you know about my next six month availability at work as I have enrolled for a course which is starting from next month. Therefore, I would like to work only 24 hours during weekdays; however, I will be available whole day during weekends.

In addition to this, I am happy to inform you that this course is related to boiler and HVAC operations, and I know that our company is working on same kind of projects. I am sure that after I gain this technical education I will aquire kno knowledge that would be greatly help me working at this place more efficiently. So, if you allote few hours to me during this period, I would be able to study this course with more focus and able to attend all learning sessions.

Thank you for your time reading this letter and looking forward to yoru message.

Yours sincerely,

Nitin

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining the reason for the request, specifying the desired hours, and describing the benefits to the employer. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. However, the development of ideas is somewhat brief. For instance, while you mention the course is related to HVAC, you could have elaborated more on how the specific skills gained would translate into immediate value for the company. The letter is functional and meets the requirements of the task, but further expansion on the benefits would have strengthened the persuasive element of your request.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter follows a logical structure, with a clear introduction, body, and closing. Paragraphing is used to separate the request from the justification. You use some cohesive devices such as 'In addition to this' and 'Therefore' to link your ideas. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally slightly mechanical. The transition between the request for hours and the explanation of the course could be smoother. Overall, the message is easy to follow, and the progression of ideas is clear throughout the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using topic-specific terms like 'HVAC operations' and 'technical education'. There are some spelling errors, such as 'aquire' (acquire), 'kno' (knowledge), 'allote' (allot), and 'yoru' (your). These errors are noticeable but do not impede the reader's understanding of your request. To reach a higher band, you should aim for more precise word choices and ensure greater accuracy in spelling, as these minor slips currently limit the score in this criterion.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as the conditional 'if you allote... I would be able to'. There are some grammatical inaccuracies, such as 'available whole day' (available all day) and 'greatly help me working' (greatly help me work). Additionally, there is a missing word in 'working on same kind of projects' (the same kind). While these errors are present, they do not cause confusion or impede communication. The sentence structures are generally functional, but more variety and closer attention to articles and prepositions would improve the accuracy.

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