Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Dear Sir/Madam

I am requesting regarding to improve the the facilities in our area.I recently moved here, so i noticed there are some lack of facilty.

I am wordering about the parks in area, the swing for children are in poor condition therefore, dumps are in park and have water on ground which have no acess to relase.

I would request you to maintain the better pipe line system for the water also to renovate the park with gym and swiming pool. Moreover, to improve the road condition as well as you can set the rules for soicety. In society we need security guard on the main entrance.

Everyone lives here make a decision to contribute funds for soicety as they can plant the trees in there area.

I really appericate your help and look forward for your reply.

kind regards,

Aman

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0

The response is completely off-topic. The prompt explicitly asks for a letter to a boss regarding a request to reduce working hours for part-time study. However, you have written a letter to a local authority complaining about neighborhood facilities, such as parks, road conditions, and security. Because you failed to address the task requirements entirely, the score is severely impacted. Additionally, the response is under the 150-word minimum requirement, which further negatively affects the score. To improve, you must carefully read the prompt and ensure your content directly answers the specific bullet points provided in the instructions.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The letter lacks logical progression and clear paragraphing. While there is an attempt to list issues, the transition between ideas is abrupt and often confusing. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate, such as the misuse of 'therefore' and 'moreover'. The structure does not follow the standard conventions of a formal letter, and the lack of clear paragraph breaks makes the text difficult to follow. To improve, focus on using clear topic sentences for each paragraph and linking ideas with appropriate transition words to guide the reader through your argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is basic and contains several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'wordering' instead of 'wondering', 'acess' instead of 'access', and 'soicety' instead of 'society'. The range of vocabulary is limited, and there is significant repetition of simple words. You struggle to express complex ideas clearly due to these lexical limitations. To improve, you should focus on learning correct spelling for common words and expanding your vocabulary related to formal letter writing, such as using more precise verbs and nouns to describe problems and requests.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that impede communication. Examples include 'I am requesting regarding to improve the the facilities', 'there are some lack of facilty', and 'Everyone lives here make a decision'. Sentence structures are mostly simple and often contain errors in subject-verb agreement, article usage, and prepositional phrases. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and punctuation is inconsistent. To improve, you need to review basic sentence construction, specifically focusing on verb tenses and the correct use of articles and prepositions in formal writing.

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