Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir, please bring your attention on this letter recently I decided to study further for my better education since I am working full time I cannot have enough time for my study. So for that reason I am asking for permission to work part time I will be doing CSE prepration it's full name is Canadien Security Eocchange this cource will help me to do my job better in future.

So for that reason I need you to give me some day's off for this I am thinking to work 3 days in a week which I will prefor Monday, Tuesday and Wednesday. But you can change the day's as your prefrence.

Eventually this will also help me and you as well as currently my position is as a life insurance agent so in this cource all marketing strategy and techniques is included this will boost my sales knowledge and marketing skills and I can hep you much better fo grow this company. looking forward to hear from you. Thank you.

Kind regards

Sadiya

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter covers all three bullet points: the reason for the request, the preferred hours, and the benefits to the employer. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of how the course benefits the employer is a bit repetitive and lacks professional depth. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal request, though the opening is slightly abrupt. To improve, you should expand on the specific skills gained from the course and how they directly translate to your daily tasks as an insurance agent to make a more persuasive case.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your request. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite mechanical and repetitive. Phrases like 'So for that reason' are used twice in quick succession, which disrupts the flow. Additionally, the transition between the request for time off and the explanation of benefits could be smoother. Using a wider variety of linking words such as 'consequently,' 'furthermore,' or 'in addition' would help create a more professional and cohesive structure throughout the letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several spelling errors, such as 'prepration' (preparation), 'Eocchange' (Exchange), 'cource' (course), 'prefor' (prefer), and 'hep' (help). Furthermore, some word choices are informal or imprecise, such as 'bring your attention on this letter' and 'give me some day's off'. To achieve a higher band, you should focus on accurate spelling and using more professional collocations, such as 'requesting a reduction in working hours' instead of 'asking for permission to work part time'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The letter contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation that occasionally impede readability. Common issues include run-on sentences (e.g., 'Dear Sir, please bring your attention...'), incorrect use of apostrophes (e.g., 'day's off'), and subject-verb agreement errors (e.g., 'all marketing strategy and techniques is included'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several missing commas and periods. To improve, focus on sentence boundaries and ensuring that subjects and verbs agree in number, as these errors currently detract from the professional tone of your writing.

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