Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to inform that I want to reduce my working hours as from next month, I am going to start my (Business Management )studies again.

I want to reduce my working hours, so that I can focus more on my studies. I need more time for my assignments, to complete them before the deadline and to prepare for my exams. I need to give more time to studies in order to get good marks, so that I can get future job in the field and expand our business.

I would like to work as a part-time employee. I will be full day available on the weekends and in the weekdays I will be available after 4 p.m. and will not be available on Mondays and Wednesdays.

My part time studies can also prove beneficial for our work as well as. During my course I will learn many skills and ideas how we can expand our business, how we can upsell and how to do marketing. After that I can apply my skills and ideas to your business can expand it.

I hope you will understand and will cooperate with my schedule from the next month. I will be very thankful to you.

Yours Sincerely,

Gunveer Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points required by the task. You clearly explained your motivation for reducing hours, specified your availability, and articulated the benefits to your employer. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. To reach a higher band, ensure your ideas are more fully developed; for instance, when mentioning how your studies will benefit the business, you could provide a more concrete example of a specific skill you expect to acquire, rather than general terms like 'marketing' or 'upselling'. Overall, the response is relevant and fulfills the requirements of the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear progression of ideas. Each paragraph focuses on a specific requirement of the task, which helps the reader follow your argument easily. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'In order to' and 'After that', to link your sentences. However, the use of transitions could be more varied to improve the flow. Some sentences feel slightly disconnected, and the repetition of 'I want to' or 'I need to' at the start of sentences makes the structure feel a bit mechanical. Using a wider range of linking words would enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey your message clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'part-time employee', 'deadlines', and 'business management'. However, there is some repetition of basic vocabulary, such as 'time', 'studies', and 'business'. To improve, try to incorporate more precise synonyms or collocations. For example, instead of saying 'get good marks', you could use 'achieve academic excellence'. There are also minor issues with word choice, such as 'I will be full day available', which should be phrased as 'I will be available for the full day'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While your meaning is always clear, there are several grammatical errors throughout the text. For example, 'I am writing this letter to inform that I want to' is missing an object (inform you). Additionally, 'my part time studies can also prove beneficial for our work as well as' is an incomplete thought. There are also minor punctuation and preposition errors, such as 'in the weekdays' instead of 'on weekdays'. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score.

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