Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear sir,

I would like to inform you that, I want to reduce my working hours as a physical therapist at clinic in order to study my course part time because i got to know my exam timetable. Moreover, it will be in next month. So, I wanted to focus on my syllabus.

I am happy to work in evening time because I am not a person who can read at night. I want fresh air in the morning. It makes me concentrate the topic. Furthermore, it is too good to rather than night. I can say that 10 on 10.

I wanted to tell you that, if I study hard in my examination. It will be upgraded in my report card. Additionally, we can keep that points on the wall of reception. After seeing that excellence results, patients will come to us and create a bond. They feel safe with us and feel free to talk about their chief complain easily. To conclude that, it would be great opportunity for our clinic.

I hope you understand my situation. I will wait for your response as soon as possible.

Yours sincereley,

Mrs Shah.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter covers all three bullet points: the reason for the request, the preferred hours, and the benefits to the employer. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. The explanation of the benefits to the employer, specifically the idea of posting exam results on a reception wall to attract patients, is quite unconventional and lacks professional tone. While the task is addressed, the ideas could be more realistically and professionally developed to better suit a formal workplace context. The tone is generally appropriate for a letter to a boss, though it occasionally lapses into informal phrasing.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Moreover,' 'Furthermore,' and 'To conclude,' though some are used mechanically or inappropriately, such as '10 on 10' which does not fit the formal context. The progression of ideas is generally logical, moving from the request to the schedule and finally the benefits. However, the transition between the request for hours and the discussion of the exam results is somewhat abrupt. Overall, the paragraphing is sufficient, but the flow could be improved with more natural linking phrases.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and professional tone expected in a formal letter. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as '10 on 10' and 'chief complain' (should be 'chief complaint'). The use of 'it is too good to rather than night' is grammatically unclear and lexically weak. While the student manages to convey the message, the range of vocabulary is limited, and there is a lack of awareness regarding professional collocations. To reach a higher band, the student should focus on using more formal, business-appropriate terminology.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. For example, 'I want to reduce my working hours as a physical therapist at clinic' lacks an article, and 'if I study hard in my examination. It will be upgraded in my report card' is a sentence fragment. There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and punctuation, such as the comma splice in the first sentence. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents a higher score.

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