Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear employer

I hope you are doing well. I would like to talk about my working hours. Actually I want to reduce my working hours because I want to do part time study. Recently, I think that I need to atted english classes because my english is not good and this language is eesential to learn and this is also beneficial own my work. Most of the staff and customers always speak english and I did not understand.

I will work on Weekend only others days I will attend english language classes so I will learn fastly as well as completed classes early so i will able to communicate with everyone smoothly.

This english course is beneficial not only for my future but also for work because I am indian and my language is punjabi I am not able to communicate anyone in english if I will attend classes than I also learn this language and will not face any problem to communicate anyone who speak english.

I hope you understand my situation and accept my working hours.

Thank you

Your's sincerely

Navjot kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: the reason for the request, the proposed schedule, and the benefits to the employer. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat repetitive, particularly regarding the need for English classes. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though the opening 'Dear employer' is slightly impersonal. To improve, you should focus on providing more professional justifications for how your studies will specifically add value to the company, rather than focusing primarily on your personal struggle with the language. The response covers the requirements, but the depth of the arguments could be enhanced to reach a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite basic and sometimes mechanical. For example, the transition between the reason for the request and the proposed schedule is abrupt. There is also some repetition of ideas, such as the mention of communicating in English, which makes the flow feel a bit circular. Using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in addition to this') would help create a smoother progression of ideas and improve the overall coherence of the letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use simple words like 'good', 'learn', and 'work'. There are also some errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'beneficial own my work' instead of 'beneficial to my work' and 'learn fastly' instead of 'learn quickly'. To improve, you should aim to use more precise professional vocabulary. For instance, instead of saying 'my english is not good', you could say 'I wish to improve my English proficiency'. Expanding your range of vocabulary will help you express your ideas with more clarity and sophistication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There is a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. You have frequent errors in verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and punctuation. For example, 'I did not understand' should be 'I do not understand', and 'than I also learn' should be 'then I will also learn'. Additionally, there are issues with capitalization and missing articles throughout the text. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to distract the reader. Focusing on basic grammatical accuracy, such as tense consistency and sentence structure, will significantly improve your writing.

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