Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir ,

I am writing this letter for making a request about reducing my working hours to follow my part time studies .As , I have recently join the computer classes for learning more advance factors of technology because of these classes I need some quality time to grab the programmes easily .

Moreover, I have classes 3 days in a week and the time duration for the session is about 3 hours . However, I work 6 days in the week and about 8hours in your company . I need 5 hours shift for 3 days and remaning days i will follow the same schduel for leftover days . In that way i can easily manage my work and studies .

These session that I join for grabing the advancement in the techno world will help me allot to manage my productivity on the work . In addition , this study helps me in the way to dealing with the online customers by soiving their issues as well guidence. I would like to you review my request and give some positive response .

Yours Sincerely,

Preet Rob

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You explained the reason for your request (computer classes), specified the desired hours, and described the benefits to your employer. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a boss. However, the explanation of the specific hours is slightly confusing; you mention needing a '5 hours shift for 3 days' but the phrasing regarding the 'remaining days' is unclear. To improve, ensure your proposed schedule is articulated with absolute clarity so your employer can easily understand your availability. Overall, the task requirements are met, and the purpose of the letter is clear throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized into paragraphs, each serving a distinct purpose. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'However', and 'In addition' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally interrupted by awkward phrasing and punctuation errors, such as the spacing around commas and periods. The transition between the explanation of your studies and the proposed schedule could be smoother. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that your punctuation does not distract from the logical progression of your argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey your message, using terms like 'productivity', 'advancement', and 'sessions'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and non-standard collocations, such as 'grab the programmes', 'techno world', and 'guidence'. Some of these choices sound informal or unnatural. To improve, focus on learning common collocations used in professional correspondence. For example, instead of 'grab the programmes', use 'master the software'. Expanding your vocabulary to include more precise, professional terminology will significantly enhance the quality of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is good. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses ('I have recently join'), articles, and prepositions ('classes 3 days in a week'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas and periods. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. To improve, pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement and basic sentence construction. Proofreading your work specifically for these recurring errors before finishing will help you achieve a higher level of accuracy.

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