Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir, I hope you are well. I am writing this letter as of i would like to reduce my working hours because of part time taken subjects.

firstly, I am not leaving this job as it has given me more financial support in my difficult time, and I have keen interest of doing job . I just need to reduce my time, need to focus on my studies. I would like to work on weekends and Friday also works for me. I do not need to disturb my co-worker schedule but if possible please help me out .I do not want to pressurize you for making such huge changes for me . If that fits in , i would prefer 3:00pm to closing for the days , I provided .

Moreover, my studies for computer programming needs more time of practicing and understanding topics thoroughly, and due to that reducing my working hours would give benefits for me .Also, it can be helpful for other employer making their savings.

your junior ,

Khushi patel.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the task: explaining the reason for the request, specifying the desired hours, and describing the benefits to the employer. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of how your studies benefit the employer is vague, as you mention 'making their savings' without clearly explaining how your new skills in computer programming would add value to the company. To improve, ensure that your arguments are more fully developed and directly linked to the employer's perspective. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though it could be more professional.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate. For example, the transition 'Moreover' is used to introduce a point that feels disconnected from the previous paragraph. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the phrase 'the days, I provided', which lacks a clear antecedent. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider range of linking words more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that flows logically into the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, but it is quite basic and repetitive. You rely on simple phrases like 'reduce my working hours' and 'help me out'. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'part time taken subjects' and 'pressurize you for making such huge changes'. To improve, try to incorporate more precise, professional vocabulary related to workplace requests and professional development. Using more varied and sophisticated word choices will help you convey your message with greater clarity and impact.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation that occasionally impede readability. For example, 'as of i would like' is grammatically incorrect, and there are issues with article usage ('the' vs 'a') and sentence fragments. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma placement and capitalization. While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors prevent the writing from reaching a higher band. Focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that your sentences are complete and correctly punctuated.

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