Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sharma,

I hope you doing well. I am writing to inform my recent availbility of work. As you know I am student and now i have a capstone project ahead. I have lot of University work. So, i decide to reduce my working hours.

I can work only 20 hours a week, and my timing from afternoon to evenings only. I am unable to work early mornings and late nights. Adding it, my all university classes morning time and i have group project too.

Although, my this availbity give you problem but, my capstone project experience also assist me in this part-time job. Because, i will learn new skills related to technology such as AI content, which is also essential for our office work. During my every day competitions in my university aid to boost my confidence and communication level.

I hope you understand my concern and accept my latest working hour avalibity.

Thank you

Your Faithfully

Sandeep Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter covers all three bullet points: the reason for the request (capstone project), the preferred hours (afternoon to evening), and the benefits to the employer (new technical skills). However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. The explanation of how the studies benefit the employer is a bit vague, relying on general statements about AI content rather than specific professional applications. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, although the opening and closing are slightly informal. To reach a higher band, you should expand on the specific ways your new skills will add value to the company's current projects.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your request. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate. For example, 'Adding it' is not a standard transition, and 'Although, my this availbity give you problem but' contains redundant and awkward phrasing. The progression of ideas is clear, but the links between sentences could be smoother. Improving your range of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in addition to this') would help the flow of your writing significantly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. There are several spelling errors, such as 'availbility' and 'avalibity', and some word choice issues, such as 'my this availbity' and 'during my every day competitions'. While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is limited to basic terms. To improve, focus on using more precise professional terminology and ensure you proofread for common spelling mistakes. Using more sophisticated collocations would also help elevate your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There is a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. You frequently omit articles ('I am student', 'in morning time') and struggle with verb tense and subject-verb agreement ('I hope you doing well', 'my this availbity give you problem'). Punctuation is also problematic, particularly with comma usage and sentence fragments. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to distract the reader. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for missing articles will help improve your accuracy.

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