Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter as I need to cut my working hours in order to study part-time for my pharmacy technician licence.

As you know, I am working in your pharmacy as a pharmacy assistant and deal with different customers for inventories, medicines, and many more. But I need to upgrade my skills and work like you as a pharmacist. so getting licence i need to learn some topics to achieve a good score.

So, please, I need your help to get this licence and i need cut some hours from my work as I am studying only 30 hours need 20 hours cut from my 5 days jobs . as, it not only help me to get this licence but also it is very helpful for your pharmacy too . the reason for that some time you are away from the office due to which i am not able to compounding medicines but this certificate help to easily dispense medicines even you are absent from your job . so, please cut some work hours for success and to get good scores.

Your sincerely,

Munish.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: the reason for the request, the specific hours, and the benefits to the employer. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention the need for a pharmacy technician license, the explanation of the specific hours is slightly confusing, as you mention '30 hours' and '20 hours' without clearly stating your preferred schedule. To improve, ensure your request is precise and professional. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though it could be more polished to better persuade your employer.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally disjointed due to the lack of varied cohesive devices. For example, the transition between discussing your current role and your request for reduced hours is abrupt. You rely heavily on simple conjunctions like 'and' or 'so'. To reach a higher band, try using more sophisticated linking words such as 'consequently,' 'furthermore,' or 'in addition to this' to create a smoother logical progression throughout the letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your needs clearly. You use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'pharmacy assistant,' 'compounding,' and 'dispense.' However, there are instances of repetitive or imprecise word choices, such as 'many more' and 'good scores.' The phrasing 'work like you' is also slightly informal for a letter to a boss. Expanding your range to include more professional collocations would enhance the quality of your writing and demonstrate a better command of the language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The letter contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading. Issues include incorrect verb forms ('getting licence i need'), missing articles ('the pharmacy'), and punctuation errors, such as the inconsistent use of capitalization and run-on sentences. For instance, 'as, it not only help me' should be 'as it will not only help me.' Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent sentence punctuation will significantly improve your accuracy and overall clarity.

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