Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Mr. Smith,

I am writing this letter for minimise my working hours.

I want to inform you, As I am starting half time study in hospitality management next month, I am not able to continue work full time. If I continue working same as now, then It will be difficult for me to manage time. Moreover, I will not be able to concentrate on both.

Since I will have classes from Monday to Friday, I would appreciate it if you allow me to do work on weekends only. On these two particular days I can work day or night either as I am comfortable with both the timings.

I am enrolling in Hospitality Management because it will help me to improve my skills, which will be beneficial for me at work as well. Besides that I will learn management part too, therefore I will help you more in the management sector and it reduces your work pressure also.

Hope you will accept my request and make arrangements according my situation.

Kind regards,

Kamaljeet Kaur.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly explained the reason for the request (part-time study), specified the desired working hours (weekends), and described the benefits to the employer (improved skills and management support). The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. To reach a higher band, ensure that your ideas are slightly more developed; for instance, you could briefly mention how your specific hospitality studies directly relate to your current daily tasks to make the argument for your employer's benefit more persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Since', and 'Besides that' to link ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical or repetitive. The paragraphing is appropriate, and the progression of ideas is easy to follow. To improve, try to vary your linking words and ensure that the relationship between sentences is always smooth, as some sentences feel a bit disjointed, such as the transition between your study schedule and your availability.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey your message clearly. You use topic-specific terms like 'hospitality management', 'enrolling', and 'work pressure'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'for minimise' (should be 'to minimize') and 'half time study' (should be 'part-time study'). Additionally, 'management part' is quite informal. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and academic or professional phrasing to enhance the sophistication of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'As I am starting... I am not able to continue work' (missing 'to' before 'work'), 'working same as now' (missing 'the'), and 'according my situation' (missing 'to'). These errors occur frequently but do not impede communication. To achieve a higher score, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct preposition usage, and ensuring that your complex sentences are constructed with greater accuracy.

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