Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mr. Patel,

I hope this letter finds you well. I am writing to request you to reduce my duty hours in order to study part time.

Firstly, I would like to explain you that I have enrolled in new course of administrative management. Thus, I have an online classes during day time from 3 pm to 7 pm. In addition, the morning shift is comfortable for me, as I can join my classes calmly. Furthermore, I would like to asked you about the reduce my duty time ,so I can focus more on my studies.

Finally, nowadays I am working as a counsellor in your company, but if I complete this course I can also help in HR department. Nonetheless, I can also manage the staff duties, help in projects and can assist in project's deal. Other than that I can develop my skills and confidence.

Your attention to this matter is greatly appreciated. I look forward to your positive response.

Yours sincerely,

Ronny Roy

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt: explaining the reason for the request, specifying the desired hours, and describing the benefits to the employer. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, while you mention the HR department, you could have provided more specific examples of how your new skills would directly improve company efficiency. The request for hours is also slightly repetitive and could be stated more clearly. Overall, the response is relevant and fulfills the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical structure with a clear opening and closing. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'In addition', 'Furthermore', and 'Finally' to link your ideas. While these are functional, the progression of ideas is sometimes a bit mechanical. Paragraphing is present, but the third paragraph is quite dense and could have been split or better organized to separate the benefits to the employer from your personal skill development. Referencing is generally clear, and the overall flow of the letter is easy to follow for the reader.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'enrolled', 'administrative management', and 'counsellor'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'reduce my duty time' (better: 'reduce my working hours') and 'project's deal' (which is unclear). You rely on some repetitive phrasing, such as 'help in' and 'manage'. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise professional terminology and avoid word-choice errors that occasionally make the meaning slightly awkward, though these do not impede overall communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text, such as 'I have an online classes' (subject-verb agreement), 'I would like to asked you' (incorrect verb form), and 'the reduce my duty time' (incorrect word class). These errors are noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding your message. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and ensuring that modal verbs are followed by the correct base form of the verb. Increasing the variety of error-free complex sentences will help improve your score.

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