Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear sir,

I am Sneh Patel currently working in your compny as an machine operator in devonport area. I want to let you know this next month I am going to start a manufacturing crash course in which I will learning CNC machine and lathe machines it is two months of study and one month of practical. So because of that reson I would like to switch to part-time for tis three months. My classes will be in the morning so I can work in closing shifts during the weekdays and fully available during the weekend. I started this course due to my keen interest in the position available in the company CNC machine oprator and setup. I know that one of the opratoe is retiring in next three months that's why I would like to apply for that also it is helpful to you as well you do not need to find someone for that. Additionally, after this study the school will give me skill trade certificate which is also besic qualification of this course.

Thank you for your understanding and cooperation.

Your faithful

Sneh Patel

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points of the prompt: explaining the reason for the request, specifying the desired hours, and outlining the benefits to the employer. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal request. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention the benefit of filling a retiring operator's role, the explanation could be more persuasive by highlighting how your new skills will specifically improve productivity or safety. The structure is clear, and the purpose of the letter is immediately apparent to the reader.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical progression, moving from the introduction to the request, the proposed schedule, and finally the benefits. Paragraphing is weak, as the entire body of the letter is contained in a single block, which makes it harder to read. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Additionally' and 'So because of that reson', the flow is occasionally interrupted by awkward phrasing. Using more varied transition words and breaking the text into distinct paragraphs for the request, the schedule, and the benefits would significantly improve the overall structure and readability.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using industry-specific terms like 'CNC machine', 'lathe machines', and 'skill trade certificate'. However, there are several spelling errors ('compny', 'oprator', 'besic') and some awkward word choices, such as 'manufacturing crash course' or 'fully available'. While these errors do not prevent the message from being understood, they do indicate a need for more careful proofreading and a wider range of precise vocabulary. Focusing on correct spelling and more natural collocations will help you reach a higher band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The letter contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('an machine operator', 'the school'), verb tenses ('I will learning'), and punctuation. Some sentences are run-on, such as 'I know that one of the opratoe is retiring in next three months that's why I would like to apply for that also it is helpful to you as well you do not need to find someone for that.' These errors occasionally impede the flow of the text. Improving your control over sentence boundaries and basic grammatical agreement is essential.

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