Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear sir or madam,

I am writing this letter to express about my future plan and want to deduct my working hours.

As i am working in your company since 10 years as a receptionist . I always did my job honesty and with full dedication. But from long time, I wanted to take admission in Masters of business administration to learn for work ethics and now i have enough funds to start it which does not matter that i want to quit this work . Moreover, I just wanted to adjust my work timing with my study times especially on weekends .

I have discussed with my university about my work routine , so they have provided me one day class on Saturday and it is evening class . therefore, i have to leave by 3 from office or may start work earlier than usual on this day.

I choose this course for my overall development as well as benefits of our organization. After finishing my degree, i would focus more on my work duties with promotion , improve my understanding to business in depth , and also find lacking areas of our company.

i look forward to your prompt response.

Yours sincerely,

Harinder kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter covers all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly explain the reason for the request (MBA studies), specify the desired hours (leaving at 3 PM on Saturdays), and describe the benefits to the employer. However, the development of these points is somewhat limited. For example, the explanation of how your studies will benefit the company is a bit vague. To improve, you should provide more concrete examples of how the MBA curriculum specifically applies to your current role as a receptionist or the company's operations. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though some phrasing is slightly informal.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your request. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover', 'therefore', and 'as well as' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally disrupted by mechanical errors and awkward transitions. For instance, the transition between your dedication to the company and your desire to study could be smoother. Additionally, the paragraphing is a bit inconsistent; the second paragraph is quite long and contains several distinct ideas that could be better separated to improve readability and logical progression.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey your message, such as 'dedication', 'overall development', and 'prompt response'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and collocation errors, such as 'deduct my working hours' (should be 'reduce'), 'learn for work ethics' (should be 'learn about work ethics'), and 'find lacking areas' (should be 'identify areas for improvement'). These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit your score. Expanding your range of collocations and using more precise business terminology would help you reach a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Common issues include incorrect verb tenses ('I am working in your company since 10 years'), missing articles ('to learn for work ethics'), and punctuation errors (spaces before commas). Additionally, there are issues with subject-verb agreement and capitalization (e.g., 'i' instead of 'I'). While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors in basic grammar and punctuation prevent a higher score. Focusing on proofreading for these small, recurring mistakes will significantly improve your accuracy.

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