Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.
Write a letter to your boss. In your letter
- explain why you want to reduce your working hours
- say which hours you would like to work
- describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ....................................,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Dear olive,
I am writing this letter to inform for a concern to reduce your working hours in order to study my part time course
I have to reduce my working hours due to attend a part-time course.It will help me to take more time in that course. because i need to dedicate my evening hours in course.
It is better to have in evening 5.00 to 6.00pm which will help me to boost my part time course .It will prefer me to go for outside classes. To reduce my working hours will help me to focus on my part time course. In evening there will be more sessions that will help me to interact with teacher and give good quality time.
It benefits to improve my further information regarding my jobs and carrear. I will help me to grow further carrear . I need to try to encode my jobs .
kindly consern my letter and you will
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The letter addresses all three bullet points: the reason for the request, the proposed hours, and the benefits to the employer. However, the development of these ideas is quite limited and repetitive. For example, the explanation of the benefits to the employer is vague, using phrases like 'improve my further information' and 'grow further carrear' without explaining how the specific skills gained will help the company. The tone is also inconsistent for a formal letter to a boss, and the closing is incomplete. To improve, you should provide more specific details about the course and clearly articulate the professional value you will bring to the company.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The letter is divided into short, disjointed paragraphs. While there is a basic attempt at logical progression, the flow is hindered by repetitive sentence structures and a lack of cohesive devices. Many sentences start with 'It will' or 'I', making the writing feel mechanical. The transitions between ideas are weak, and the letter ends abruptly without a proper sign-off. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in addition') to connect your ideas more fluidly and ensure each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, with several instances of incorrect word choice. For example, 'inform for a concern' is unnatural, and 'encode my jobs' is unclear and likely misused. There are also spelling errors such as 'carrear' (career) and 'consern' (consider). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas clearly. To improve, focus on learning collocations related to professional requests and workplace communication, and ensure you check the spelling of key professional terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Issues include incorrect preposition usage ('due to attend' instead of 'due to attending'), subject-verb agreement errors, and awkward phrasing. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with irregular spacing and missing terminal punctuation in the final sentence. To improve, practice using a mix of complex sentence structures, such as conditional sentences ('If I were to reduce my hours...') or relative clauses, and pay closer attention to basic verb forms and sentence boundaries.
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