Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear sir,

I hope you are doing well. The purpose of my writing today is to inform you about the request of my working hours limitation for upcoming some months.

To begin with, I recently started my part time education for advancement of technical knowledge. On top of that, the class time would be in morning in two days a week, although I would appreciated if you will allow me to work in afternoon for those days. Additionally, this certificate would assist me to grow more in the organizational management skills. Moreover, after achieve this credential, I can not only be contribute in financial decisions but also assist in the upcoming continuous improvement project.

Overall, given the aforementioned scenario I am looking forward to seeing how my suggestions translate into prompt actions from your side. Furthermore, an open line of communication, from your side, in this case would greatly help. Your cooperation would be most appreciated.

Your faithfully,

Rutvik

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt: explaining the reason for the request, specifying the desired hours, and outlining the benefits to the employer. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter to a boss. However, the development of ideas is somewhat brief. For instance, while you mention 'organizational management skills,' providing a slightly more concrete example of how this would specifically help your current role would have strengthened the response. Overall, the purpose of the letter is clear and the requirements are met.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each serving a distinct purpose. You use cohesive devices such as 'To begin with,' 'On top of that,' and 'Additionally' to guide the reader through your points. While the flow is generally good, some transitions feel slightly mechanical or repetitive. The use of referencing is clear, and the overall structure follows the standard conventions of a formal business letter, which helps the reader follow your argument without difficulty.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'advancement,' 'organizational management,' and 'credential.' However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'working hours limitation' (better: 'reduction in my working hours') and 'after achieve this' (should be 'after achieving'). While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise control over word forms and collocations to reach a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is good. However, there are several grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'I would appreciated if you will allow me' (should be 'I would appreciate if you would allow me') and 'I can not only be contribute' (should be 'I can not only contribute'). These errors occur frequently enough to be noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding your request. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and modal verb usage will help improve your accuracy.

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