Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

My name is Jay Patel and I am working as a production engineer in manufacturing department. I am writing this letter to request you that I need to cut-down my current timing as I wish to pursue higher study part-time in business management.

I have been working as an production engineer since last four years and I have gain valuable experience and significantly improve my technical skills. For future perspectives and acquire fundamental knowledge about team management, effective communication as well as personal growth/ I would like to study further in business administration. Due to which I need to change my working time due to conflict with my university schedule. Therefore, I f you can adjust my timing from 7.00am to 1.00pm during weekdays, it will be really helpful for me.

I also want to mentioned that I can implement new techniques and effective ways of increasing productivity at our workplace after completing my academics. Which can be not only beneficial for company s growth but also help to increases its profit.

Hope I will hear from you soon.

Yours faithfully,

Jay

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly explained your motivation for reducing hours, specified the desired schedule (7.00am to 1.00pm), and provided a logical benefit to your employer regarding productivity and new techniques. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a supervisor. To improve, ensure that your ideas are fully developed; for instance, you could briefly mention how your specific studies in business management relate to your current role as a production engineer to make the argument more persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter follows a logical structure, with each paragraph focusing on a specific requirement of the task. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Therefore', 'I also want to mentioned', and 'as well as' to link your ideas. However, the flow is occasionally interrupted by minor errors in sentence structure, such as the sentence fragment starting with 'Which can be not only...'. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that your sentences are complete and correctly connected to the preceding clauses.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for this task, using terms like 'pursue higher study', 'fundamental knowledge', and 'production engineer'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'cut-down my current timing' (should be 'reduce my working hours') and 'future perspectives' (which is slightly unnatural in this context). Additionally, there are minor grammatical errors affecting word forms, such as 'I have gain' instead of 'I have gained'. Expanding your range of collocations would help improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses and subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'I have gain', 'I also want to mentioned', 'help to increases'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with a slash used instead of a comma and some missing articles. To improve, focus on proofreading for basic tense consistency and ensuring that complex sentences are constructed accurately without fragments.

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