Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Hye manager,

I hope you are doing great,

I am writing to request regarding my job hours to make it more less for me as I have to give my final project submission this coming week.

To begin with, I would like to say that the store hours are right now extremely busy. Unfortunately, I am un able to work 24 hours per week like I used to do before. As, I am in my last semester right now and I have to submit my capstone project which is time consuming and demanding.

Furthermore, I wish this week i can get just 15 hours instead of getting the 24 hours per week. Moreover, I really want to work in morning shifts. So, In that way I can give the rest of my time to study and I feel like I am more focused in the night.

Finally, I really want to tell you that It will be so great if I get my Master's Degree in Marketing. It will be so essential for your business as, I can design flyers and campaigns.

Thank you for your time and consideration. I hope you will get back to me at your earliest convinience.

Regards

Raana

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points of the prompt: explaining the reason for the request, specifying the desired hours, and describing the benefits to the employer. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal request to a manager, although the opening 'Hye manager' is too informal. The ideas are relevant, though the explanation of how the studies benefit the employer could be more professionally articulated. The letter successfully conveys the necessary information to the reader, fulfilling the requirements of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into paragraphs, each focusing on a specific part of the prompt. Cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Furthermore', 'Moreover', and 'Finally' are used to link ideas. However, some of these transitions feel slightly mechanical or are used in contexts where they do not flow naturally. The paragraphing is clear, and the overall progression of the letter is easy to follow, despite some minor issues with sentence-level connectivity.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing the writer to express their needs clearly. There are some instances of informal or imprecise word choices, such as 'make it more less' and 'I really want to tell you'. While the writer attempts to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'capstone project' and 'campaigns', the overall range is somewhat limited. Spelling is generally accurate, though 'convinience' is misspelled. The language used is sufficient to communicate the message without difficulty.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'I am un able to work' (spacing), 'like I used to do before' (redundant), and 'I wish this week i can get' (tense/modal usage). Punctuation is inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and capitalization after periods. While these errors are noticeable, they do not impede the reader's understanding of the request. A wider range of error-free complex structures would be required for a higher band score.

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