Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to request you to reduce my working hours in your pharmacy, because I have enrolled into the master course of clinical pharmacist. I am unable to manage working as well as studying, it is interfering with my studies and caused me a significant inconvenience.

I would like you to request a change of timings, if possible from evening 4 pm, as i will be free from my classes. If its not appropriate for you can suggest me some alternatives. I will me happy to discuss with you.

I believe that studying a clinical pharmacist course would improve my career prospects and improve my skills needed in a clinical care setting which will help me in idenfying drug interactions, reviewing patients medication charts and counselling patient about safe and effective use of medicines. I also think that this will be a rewarding experience because it direct contributes to patients overall well being.

Iam looking forward for your prompt response.

Yours Sincerly,

Zahra Fatima.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The candidate successfully addresses all bullet points outlined in the prompt. The letter begins by clearly explaining the reason for reducing working hours, citing enrollment in a master course in clinical pharmacy. The second bullet point is covered by specifying the preferred working hours from 4 PM onwards, and the third bullet point is effectively addressed by detailing how the advanced studies will benefit the employer through improved clinical skills, identifying drug interactions, and counseling patients. The tone is appropriate for a formal business letter to a boss. Ideas are relevant and fully developed, earning this response a solid band score.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter maintains a clear overall progression and logical organization. The formatting includes an appropriate salutation ('Dear Sir/Madam,') and a conventional closing ('Yours Sincerly,'). Paragraphing is used to separate the introduction, the specific request for hours, the professional benefits to the employer, and the conclusion. While the use of cohesive devices is generally functional, some transitions feel slightly mechanical (e.g., 'I also think that...'), and punctuation in transitional clauses could be polished. However, the logical flow is clear throughout, and referencing remains accurate, making it easy for the reader to follow the writer's intentions.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, demonstrating an understanding of workplace and academic contexts with terms like 'clinical pharmacist', 'career prospects', and 'drug interactions'. However, there are minor lexical and collocation slips, such as writing 'enrolled into the master course' instead of 'enrolled in a master's course' and 'direct contributes' instead of 'directly contributes'. Spelling is mostly accurate except for minor slips like 'idenfying'. Less common lexical items are attempted with some success, showing sufficient range to convey precise meanings.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The writer employs a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as conditional clauses ('If its not appropriate for you you can suggest me some alternatives') and subordinate clauses. There are a few grammatical inaccuracies and punctuation errors, notably comma splices and missing apostrophes (e.g., 'master course', 'If its not', 'patients medication charts', 'patients overall well being'). Despite these errors, the majority of simple sentences are accurate, and communication is never impeded. The grammatical control reflects a steady intermediate level.

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