Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing to request a change in my working hours because I have recently enrolled part time online IT course, which will start next week in the evening time.

Unfortunately, I did not capable attend evening class if you give me full day schedule as my class have start evening from 5pm to 7pm. Due to which, I can work only morning time between 5am to 4pm. As a result, I could more concentration on my study which will complete in one month.

Furthermore, I think that morning hours best for me to complete work, and it will help me to complete to basic daily requirements.

In addition to it, part-time study not only help me but also help you for your business's growth. As, I can make free template for advertising your business, and it also help me to earn more money from digital platforms.

Please, if could you possible make schedule according to my availability.

Thank you for your time and consideration,

Kind regards,

Jass.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response successfully covers all the bullet points outlined in the prompt. You clearly explain the reason for wanting to reduce your hours by mentioning your enrollment in a part-time online IT course. You also state the specific hours you would like to work, which are in the morning between 5 am and 4 pm, and you attempt to describe how your studies would benefit your employer by offering to create free templates for business advertising. However, some of your ideas lack clarity and full development, particularly the benefit to your employer, which is somewhat briefly and awkwardly explained. Because you addressed all requirements of the task, you have earned a Band 6.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

Your letter has a coherent overall arrangement and follows a logical letter format with an appropriate greeting and sign-off. You attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'In addition to it', and 'As a result', although some links are used rather mechanically or incorrectly, such as starting sentences with 'As' or 'Due to which'. Paragraphing is used to separate your points, though some paragraphs are quite short and choppy. Referencing is generally clear, but awkward phrasing sometimes makes the logical progression between sentences a bit bumpy. These features place your coherence and cohesion at a Band 6.0 level.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using words related to work and study such as 'enrolled', 'schedule', 'availability', and 'digital platforms'. However, there are notable word-choice and collocation errors that hinder precision, such as writing 'did not capable attend' instead of 'am not capable of attending', and 'complete to basic daily requirements' instead of 'meet basic daily requirements'. You also make spelling and phrasing slips. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they restrict your score to a Band 5.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but your writing contains frequent grammatical errors and awkward structures. Examples of errors include 'online IT course, which will start next week in the evening time', 'as my class have start evening', and 'if could you possible make schedule'. Sentences like 'Unfortunately, I did not capable attend evening class' show severe structural inaccuracies. While your basic meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of grammatical mistakes means that your control over complex structures is limited, fitting the Band 5.0 descriptors.

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