Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear sir,

My name is Pawan and i am full-time welder in your company.Actually, i want to decrese my working hours because i want to take a part-time study course.Therefore, i cannot work ful-time and i want to join night shift of our work which is helpful for my career.Because,my classes would be held at a day time which i able to attend if get night shift.

Furthermore, my course could help us to make things easier on our workplace because it is related to welding graphic design as well i would learn about how to operate technical things on workplace in which we are faced huge problems. These all hurdles we can sort out if i get diploma in welding field.

That's why, it is important to reduce my hours and transfer me in night shift . Kindly concentrate on this appeal.

Thanks

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses all parts of the bullet points by explaining the desire to reduce hours, stating the preferred night shift hours, and describing how the studies would benefit the employer through welding graphic design. However, some ideas remain under-developed, such as the exact details of the technical problems. Furthermore, the length requirement is not met, as the response is slightly below the minimum word count of 150 words, sitting at 144 words. To reach a higher band, all parts of the prompt would need fuller extension and the length requirement must be fully satisfied.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter maintains a coherent overall arrangement with clear paragraph breaks separating the introduction, body points, and conclusion. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Furthermore' and 'That's why', though referencing is at times a little mechanical and abrupt. Paragraphing is used sufficiently to structure the letter logically from stating the purpose to outlining workplace benefits and making the final request. To progress further, paragraph transitions could be smoother and referencing words more varied to guide the reader effortlessly through the text.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary is minimally adequate for the task, with attempts at less common phrasing such as 'welding graphic design' and 'technical things'. However, there are noticeable errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'decrese' instead of decrease, 'ful-time' instead of full-time, and 'day time' instead of daytime. These errors do not completely impede communication, but they cause some difficulty for the reader. To achieve a higher band, vocabulary range needs to be wider and more precise, accompanied by greater spelling accuracy.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writing displays a limited range of sentence structures, relying heavily on basic forms alongside faulty attempts at complex sentences, such as 'which i able to attend if get night shift.' There are frequent errors in articles, prepositions, and verb patterns, such as 'i am full-time welder', 'in your company.Actually', and 'transfer me in night shift'. These frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader. To improve, the writer needs to demonstrate a better mix of error-free complex structures and correct control over basic grammatical patterns.

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