Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Der sir

I am writing this lettes. to inform to you that. i would like to reduce my working hours

As, i explain why i want to reduce my working houes.nowadays i do my study so that in working hours i donot contarte proper my study. because study id more important in my life.so that i request you my working hours luka. my working hours wy8:00am to 9:00pm. so that i have request my working hours is 8:00am to 6:00pm.

Moreover, my working hours is 8:00am to 9:00pm. so taht time i have not proper time do in my study. because next week my exam to i have proper doinh my study.so that 6;00pm to 9:00pm i have doing my exam parstek.

At last, part-time studies more benefit employer. so that is more better lifestlye leve their. nowadays study is moer helpfull.that reason for benefit for employer.

your faitherfully

Manisa

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the main purpose of the letter, which is to request reduced working hours for part-time studies, but the coverage is partial and heavily constrained by limited development. While you mention why you want to reduce your hours, such as needing time for exams, your explanation of the specific hours you wish to work is repetitive and confusing, mentioning different times like eight to six and six to nine. Additionally, the description of how your studies would benefit your employer is extremely limited and vague, stating simply that it makes a better lifestyle without clearly connecting your academic progress to workplace advantages. To reach a higher level, every bullet point in the prompt needs to be fully expanded with clear, logical details and realistic professional justifications.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The letter shows a basic attempt at organisation, but there is no clear overall progression of ideas, placing the response in the lower bands. Although you use paragraph breaks, the internal structure of each paragraph is disjointed and difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are used repetitively and often inaccurately, particularly the excessive use of phrases like 'so that' and 'because' to link unrelated clauses. Reference words and pronoun use are also weak, making it hard for the reader to follow the connections between your reasons, your proposed hours, and the benefits to your employer. To improve cohesion, you need to use a wider variety of accurate linking words and ensure that each paragraph builds logically on the previous one.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used throughout the letter is limited and basic, restricting your ability to express your ideas precisely. There are numerous noticeable errors in word choice, word form, and spelling that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader, such as writing 'lettes' for letter, 'contarte' for concentrate, and 'faitherfully' for faithfully. You also rely heavily on repetitive phrasing, using simple terms like 'study', 'working hours', and 'benefit' multiple times without attempting more sophisticated or natural alternatives. To achieve a higher score, you need to expand your working vocabulary, learn correct word forms for different parts of speech, and pay closer attention to standard spelling conventions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mainly of simple structures and frequent attempts at complex sentences that are heavily flawed. There are frequent errors in grammar, punctuation, and sentence construction, such as missing articles, incorrect verb tenses, and sentence fragments like 'next week my exam to i have proper doinh my study.' These errors frequently impede communication and place a heavy strain on the reader. Punctuation is also used incorrectly, with periods placed randomly within sentences rather than at their conclusions. To improve your grammar score, you must focus on constructing complete, grammatically sound sentences and reducing basic errors in verb forms and agreement.

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