Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing to you to request the reduction of my scheduling hours as I have took admission in Register Practical nursing to complete my further education.

The foremost reason is to give time to my nursing course because while working as a full time I would not be able to concentrate on my studies. Apart from that, my clinical placement will have clashes with my job hours that will be difficult to handle .

As my clinical placement will usually be on the weekdays, it would be great if I work 12 hour shifts on the weekends. In this way, I would be able to manage my expenses along with my study. Moreover, you would also benefit as you do not have to face staff crisis during the weekends.

Not only this, after an year I would be able to work as a licensed nurse in our organisation after the completion of my studies. I remembered one of our RPN is getting retired at the end of the year and our home does not have to haunt for another nurse.Moreover, I will try my best to bring asset to a company.

I would appreciate your immediate attention to this matter.

Yours faithfully ,

Charushikha

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You address all three requested points and maintain a clear, appropriate purpose throughout. You explain that full-time work would make it difficult to focus on your nursing course and that clinical placements may clash with work. Your preferred arrangement—12-hour weekend shifts—is specific, and you connect your studies to the employer’s future staffing needs by mentioning that you could work as a licensed nurse. These ideas are relevant and supported, although the benefit to the employer is somewhat general: the claim that weekend shifts would prevent a staff shortage could be explained more clearly, and the final point about replacing a retiring nurse is awkwardly expressed. A more precise explanation of how your qualification would help the organisation would strengthen the letter further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter has a clear progression: you state your request, explain the reason, propose working hours, and describe a possible benefit to the employer before closing politely. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and linking phrases such as “Apart from that,” “Moreover,” and “Not only this” guide the reader through your points. The overall organisation is easy to follow. However, some transitions feel mechanical or do not clearly show the relationship between ideas; for example, “Not only this” introduces a new benefit without completing a clear paired construction. The sentence about the retiring nurse also combines several points, making the progression less smooth. Use simpler, more precise links and separate the staffing benefit from your future career contribution.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for a formal workplace request, including “clinical placement,” “full time,” “licensed nurse,” and “completion of my studies.” These terms communicate the main subject clearly, and the tone is generally suitable. There are, however, several inaccurate or unnatural choices that reduce precision: “scheduling hours” is less natural than “working hours,” “staff crisis” is not the usual collocation, and “haunt for another nurse” appears to be an incorrect word choice that obscures your meaning. “Bring asset to a company” is also not idiomatic. Aim to learn common workplace collocations and check word forms and spelling, especially in the sentence about the organisation’s staffing needs.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex structures, including reason clauses with “as,” a conditional sentence beginning “if,” and a future-time clause with “after.” The main message remains understandable, and some sentences are structured effectively. Some grammatical errors remain, however. For example, “I have took admission” has an incorrect verb form, and “while working as a full time” is an incomplete construction. There are also article and agreement issues in “after an year” and “our home does not have to haunt,” as well as punctuation spacing before the full stop in “handle .” Review past participles, articles, and complete clause structures. Proofreading sentence endings and punctuation would also improve control.

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