Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear, Smith

I hope you are doing well,I am writing this letter to let you know about working less hours as compared to my past availability.Firstly, I am working as a cashiers in your store.I am full time now but I want to short my hours because of my study . I am doing course of accounting. There are two days classes in a week so I have to concentrate on that.

Secondly, I just able to do work at weekend and two evenings of Tuesday and Wednesday. To explain more, Monday thurday have class and friday I want to keep my self free to keep my mind fresh. Other free time will be utilized to learn some accounting skill.

Lastly,This study will help us on my work.It will be helpful to make invoice, manging tax ,help in make salaries and so on.I hope you will understand my situation and working hours will be adjusted.

your faithfully

Satveer Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points: you explain that your accounting course requires study time, specify weekend work and two evening shifts, and describe possible benefits such as helping with invoices, tax and salaries. The request is clear, and the employer benefits are relevant. However, some details are less fully explained: the proposed schedule is difficult to interpret because you mention classes on Monday and Thursday, then say you are available on Tuesday and Wednesday evenings without stating exact hours. The benefit to the store is also listed rather than developed—for example, you could explain how accounting knowledge would improve a particular work process. This covers the task well overall, with some room to make the arrangements and supporting details more precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a recognisable progression: you introduce the request, explain your studies, give your availability, and then describe how the course could help the store. The sequence markers “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “Lastly” make the main sections easy to identify, and the reader can follow your overall purpose. At times, however, these links feel mechanical, and some connections between details are unclear. For instance, the shift from “two days classes in a week” to the specific days Monday and Thursday could be made more direct. Paragraphing would also help separate the request, proposed schedule and employer benefits. A clearer closing request and a conventional sign-off would make the letter’s ending feel more complete.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough task-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “accounting,” “invoice,” “tax” and “salaries.” However, the range is limited, and several noticeable word-choice, word-form and spelling problems make parts less natural or briefly difficult to understand. Examples include “short my hours,” “cashiers,” “thurday,” “manging tax” and “keep my self free.” Some expressions, such as “working less hours as compared to my past availability,” are unnecessarily awkward. Aim for accurate workplace and study-related collocations, such as “reduce my working hours,” “part-time accounting course” and “prepare invoices.” More precise vocabulary would help you explain both your schedule and the value of your studies clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You communicate the main message using simple sentences and some attempts to connect ideas, such as “There are two days classes in a week so I have to concentrate on that.” However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and errors in sentence formation, agreement, articles and punctuation occur often enough to affect smooth reading. For example, “I am working as a cashiers” has an agreement problem, while “I just able to do work” is missing a verb. The opening also runs several clauses together without appropriate spacing or sentence boundaries. Practise building accurate sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check articles and punctuation. For example: “I am currently a full-time cashier, but I would like to reduce my hours so I can focus on my accounting course.”

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