Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing in response to submit a request to reduce my working hours due to my studies.

Actually, I recenlty enrolled in a part-time computer technology course at WCC. I have my classes on weekdays in the morning.I want the weekends to be free as it allow me to focus on my studies. Moreover, if I work more hours than expected then it may lead to stress and health issues.

On the basis of my class timings,I would like to work in the evening of weekdays. As I have enrolled in part -time so I have possibility to work all the weekdays. Moreover, it will not affect the quality of your work as I definitely keep track of my sleeping schedule.

I believe this study will assist me to get a professional role in your company. Furthermore, it wil be a better opportunity as it build up my profile stronger. Additionally, boost up my CRS scores toward Permanent Residency of Canada.

I would appreciate to you

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three requested points: you explain that your course and weekday morning classes motivate the request, propose working weekday evenings, and describe possible benefits to the company. The strongest relevant benefit is that the course could help you move into a professional role within the company. However, this point is not developed with a specific example of how your new skills would help your work, while the reference to improving your Canadian permanent-residency score is less directly connected to the employer’s interests. The request also needs a clear, complete closing. To strengthen the letter, explain what computer-technology skills you expect to gain and how they could be applied in your role, then state the requested arrangement directly and politely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a generally clear sequence: it gives the reason for writing, explains your study schedule, proposes working hours, and then discusses benefits. Paragraphing helps distinguish these points, and connectors such as “Moreover” and “Furthermore” show relationships between ideas. Some links are mechanical or unclear, however. For example, “I want the weekends to be free” is followed by a reason about stress, but the connection between weekend availability and the proposed weekday-evening schedule could be made more explicit. The final sentence, “I would appreciate to you,” is incomplete and leaves the letter without a clear ending. Use a direct request and a conventional closing to make the progression feel complete.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main message, including “part-time computer technology course,” “working hours,” and “professional role.” There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “On the basis of my class timings,” although this sounds unnatural in this context. Several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, including “submit a request,” “boost up my CRS scores,” and “build up my profile stronger.” Spelling slips such as “recenlty” and “wil” also reduce accuracy. These issues do not prevent the reader from understanding your purpose, but more natural workplace language would make the letter clearer and more professional. Prefer precise phrases such as “request a reduction in my hours” and “develop skills that could benefit the company.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use both simple sentences and some longer structures, including the conditional “if I work more hours than expected then it may lead to stress and health issues” and the clause beginning “as I have enrolled.” The main message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors and punctuation problems are noticeable. For example, “as it allow me” needs subject–verb agreement, and “I would appreciate to you” does not form a complete grammatical request. There are also missing spaces after full stops and commas, as in “morning.I” and “timings,I.” Check agreement, sentence completion, and punctuation carefully. Practising polite request patterns such as “I would appreciate it if you could consider…” would improve accuracy in this letter.

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