Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mario,

I am writing this letter to ask if you can reduce my working hours to part-time as I am planning to pursue more study during next summer. I hope this sponteneous decision do not affect our department production targets.

Apart from that I would appreciated if you can allowed me to work after 1Pm on weekdays rather than our regular hours of operation. This will not only help me to complete my studies in the morning but also helps our organization to keep our production continuos during peak time during noon.

I am more than happy to share that this studies will be benefitted to our department as we are constantly looking for someone to cover higher level position. Therefor after completing my graduation I will be eligible to apply in that position so our hiring department do not need to look for someone outside of our company.

Hoping for your favourable response from you regarding my application.

Kind regards,

Jay Boe

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points: you explain that you want to study, specify that you would work after 1 p.m. on weekdays, and describe how your qualification could help fill a higher-level vacancy internally. The letter also maintains an appropriate, polite purpose. The employer benefit is relevant, but it is more fully explained than the reason for studying: “pursue more study during next summer” does not say what you plan to study or why it matters to you. The proposed schedule is also somewhat unclear because you do not state an end time or the number of hours requested. These details keep the response from developing every part equally; clarify your course and proposed working pattern to strengthen it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: the opening makes the request, the next paragraph proposes a schedule, and the final body paragraph explains the employer’s potential benefit. The closing is also suitable for a formal request. Linking phrases such as “Apart from that,” “not only…but also,” and “Therefor” show an effort to connect ideas, and the reader can follow the main message. However, some connections are mechanical or do not express the relationship precisely. “Apart from that” introduces the schedule as though it were a separate issue, while it is part of the same request; “Therefor” begins a conclusion but the sentence’s logic is not fully clear. Use more direct transitions and make the links between studying, the qualification, and the vacancy explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for a workplace letter, including “production targets,” “peak time,” “higher level position,” and “eligible to apply.” These phrases help communicate the practical and professional reasons for your request. There are, however, several spelling and word-choice or collocation errors that make the language less natural, such as “sponteneous,” “continuos,” and “this studies will be benefitted.” “Production during peak time during noon” is also repetitive and awkward. Aim for accurate, conventional workplace phrasing, for example, “maintain production during the midday peak” and “my studies will benefit the department.” More precise vocabulary would make your ideas sound clearer and more professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex forms, including the “not only…but also” construction and a conditional explanation of how your qualification could help the department. The main message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors occur in key sentences. For example, “I would appreciated if you can allowed me” combines incorrect verb forms; a more accurate pattern is “I would appreciate it if you could allow me.” In “this studies will be benefitted,” the demonstrative and verb construction do not agree, and “I hope this … decision do not affect” has a subject–verb agreement error. There are also awkward tense choices in “helps” after “will.” Review modal verbs, agreement, and consistent verb forms, while retaining your attempts at longer sentences.

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