Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

The intent of this correspondence is to bring this matter to your attention and seek an appropriate resolution.

Regarding my study, I would love to highlight a few important observations. I will start my part-time study from the following month for 8 months. That would be immensely beneficial, if you can change my current job position full-time to part-time for 12 months. Furthermore,I am planning to pay full attention on my academical career.

According to my academic schedule, I am available to work on weekends and on holidays as well. Moreover, when my final schedule will post on a site, I will give my availability accordingly. Additionally, I can be able to do 20 to 30 hours a week for sure.

To resolve this matter satisfactorily, I will be available before and after study for a work. I am planning to get food and safety licence too. On top of that, my academical study in 'Hospitality and Hotel Management' will be beneficial for your restaurant as well. I am planning stay in London for long time, I really want to stick with this job.

I extend my appreciation for your consideration and i anticipate your valued response at your earliest convenience.

Yours sincerely,

Maitri Bavarva

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points: you explain that you plan to study Hospitality and Hotel Management, propose weekend and holiday work with a weekly range of 20–30 hours, and describe how your studies and a food-safety licence could help the restaurant. The request is clear, and your intention to remain with the employer adds relevant context. This meets the task well, though some details are less fully developed: the exact hours or days you prefer are not specified, and the benefit to the employer is asserted rather than explained with examples of skills you could apply. Clarifying the requested schedule and linking your course to practical improvements at work would make the proposal more persuasive and complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a recognisable progression: it introduces the request, discusses study and availability, then explains potential benefits and closes politely. Paragraphing helps separate these points, and expressions such as “Furthermore” and “Moreover” guide the reader. However, some transitions feel mechanical or do not show the relationship between ideas clearly. For example, “To resolve this matter satisfactorily” introduces availability and qualifications without explaining how these resolve the scheduling request. The sentence about providing availability once the schedule is posted also interrupts the description of preferred hours. Grouping the request and proposed schedule together, then explaining employer benefits in a separate paragraph, would create clearer progression and more precise links.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of formal and topic-related vocabulary, including “academic schedule,” “availability,” “Hospitality and Hotel Management,” and “beneficial.” These choices make the purpose and workplace context clear. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “seek an appropriate resolution” and “valued response,” but these sound overly elaborate for a straightforward letter to a boss. Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, including “academical career,” “final schedule will post on a site,” and “stick with this job.” Aim for precise, natural workplace language rather than formal-sounding phrases. More accurate collocations would improve fluency and help you express your request and the value of your studies more convincingly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, and the main message remains understandable. For instance, you use a conditional request (“if you can change…”) and a relative clause in “when my final schedule will post on a site.” However, some errors in verb forms, sentence construction, articles, and punctuation reduce accuracy. Examples include “when my final schedule will post” (use a present form after “when” for a future event), “I am planning stay” (include “to”), and “I can be able to do” (choose one modal construction). The sentence beginning “I am planning to stay in London…” also needs clearer punctuation or a conjunction. Review these patterns and check sentence boundaries; more consistently accurate complex sentences would strengthen the letter.

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