Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear sir,

I am writing to request you to reduce my working hours. Actually, I want to take computer skills and english communication skills for my future career and to get a well paid job.However, for that purpose i will need to take english language course and computer skills course from a good reputed academy.

However, i would really appreciate if you could reduce my working hours to complete my ambition. As my current job tim is from 9 am to 5 pm so i want four hours to take the course, could you please accept my leave at at 1 pm in a day.

Moreover, as you expect good skills and good communication level for your company so my study will be very beneficial for you. Once i learn more skills i will work more better to make your company more successful.

I would be really thankful to you if you will take my request seriously.

I look farward to hearing from you soon.

yours faithfuly, farya

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points: you explain that you want to study English and computer skills, request a change to your schedule, and describe how the learning could help the company. The purpose of the letter is clear, and the benefit to your employer is relevant. However, the requested hours are not fully clear: “I want four hours to take the course” and “accept my leave at 1 pm in a day” do not specify precisely when you would work or whether you are asking to finish at 1 p.m. The employer benefit is also asserted rather than developed; explain, for example, which work tasks or communication needs the new skills would improve. These details would make the request more complete and persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter follows a sensible overall order: request and reason, proposed schedule, employer benefit, and closing. Paragraph breaks help distinguish these stages, and linking expressions such as “Moreover” make the relationship between ideas apparent. Some connections are mechanical or unclear, however. “However” is used twice where the ideas are not contrasting, and the schedule sentence combines several points without clearly showing the proposed arrangement. The final request and sign-off are also separated from the main explanation without a particularly smooth transition. Use fewer, more purposeful connectors and give the working-hours proposal its own clear sentence or paragraph. This would strengthen the progression while preserving the generally coherent structure.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main purpose, including “request,” “beneficial,” “skills,” and “successful.” There are also attempts at more formal expressions, such as “I would really appreciate” and “I would be really thankful.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural: “take computer skills,” “good reputed academy,” “complete my ambition,” and “work more better.” Spelling errors such as “tim,” “farward,” and “faithfuly” also reduce accuracy. Choose more natural phrases such as “enrol in courses,” “a reputable academy,” and “achieve my goal,” and proofread spelling. This would make the vocabulary more precise and appropriate for a workplace letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including the conditional idea “Once I learn more skills, I will…” and a polite request clause. The main message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “I would really appreciate if” needs “it” before “if,” while “if you will take my request” would normally use “if you take my request.” The schedule sentence beginning “As my current job tim is…” is not well formed, and “I will work more better” has an incorrect comparative construction. Capitalisation and punctuation also need attention, as in lowercase “i” and the missing space after “job.” Review conditional forms, sentence boundaries, and comparative structures to improve control.

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